Well I'm writing a book kind of like Harry potter, and i'm wondering if anyone thought of something that they'd like to see in the HP novels that isn't in them. I myself had many ideas and so i started wrinting this book, i'm on chapter 13 and i'm stuck so I thought this would be a good place to ask the Potter Public what they've missed out on.

Thank You
October

P.S
The picture included in this post is a picture of my main character without her school things, please do not take this picture.

~Ideas Already Given~
-Secret Societies

I'm also going to put my Ideas down and i'd like to know if you think there good.

Can't think of any now but when i do i'll put them in this post.

Could you give us a bit of your story line so we know what type of ideas exactly you would be looking for?

OOH PUT ME IN DTORY!!!!

Ok.

~ABOUT~
It's almost like HP. The main character is a Girl and Still has her Parents I put her Name as October Her Friends names are Tom, Ron and Jazz (Jazz Is actually Rons older sister) and of corse her enemy is Cappy. She is going to a school called Gammot (Hense {sp?} the name) October was told that none of her family has ever gone to that school but it was a lie, her great great Grandmother had gone to Gammot and had found out all the secrets about it, she had made enemies and friends some including the werewolf tribe that lived underneath the school, but before her grandmother made friends with these beasts she had to face all twenty two of them on her own. Twenty were killed and two still live in the castle from this day, they were waiting for October to come before they called the others. Is October going to live after she tries to fight all the werewolfs? You'll have to wait and see.

Clip from chapter5 = Detention
"Miss Gladice you will be writing letters to these people today!" A peice of parchment with about 100 names was being held up in front of Octobers face by Professeur Bensia. October said nothing but got strait to work. This punishment was very uneventful until she got to the list of G's:
Eloise Gladice (her Great great grandmother)
Wendy Gladice (Her mother)
Athena Gladice (Her sister who she doesn't know yet.
What does she say to these three? Again, you'll need to wait.


I hope thats ok and I hope it gives you a good idea of what Gammot is about.

I love this book so far by the way...I've read it already..

:angry: JAY!!! Don't lie...I haven't let anyone but my Mother, Father, Brother and Sisters read it yet...and it's not even done yet. So even if I did let you read it (Which I didn't) you wouldn't be able to say you've read it because you wouldn't have finished reading it!!!

But other than that...I have nothing to go on except... a lie... a society of people... and enimies... AND I'VE USED THEM ALL ALREADY!!! Grrrrrh...
Oh well...

You know what...I'm not even gonna dignify that with a proper resopnce!!!

Well I think that the small parts that I have read of this book so far are really good. But if you don't mind I'm going to give you a little constructive critisism. The plot line is teriffic, but I think you should try and word what your trying to say a bit better. I have read up to chapter twenty (Because that's about how far she is now) and I think that again it is very good plot but the wording instead of saying like 'so they left' use bigger words, or even just different words instead of 'left' you could use 'headed out' or something. Just a sugestion...You don't need to use my advice though.