Name: Koru Shiruva
Gender: Male
Age: 17
Nationality: Republic
Zoid: Ptera
AIM: coleyguacamoley93

Personality: Koru is a calm and collected type of person. He is very nice, polite, and is liked by most people. However, he is also very shy. He'll never be the type of person to strike up a conversation with random people, which makes it hard for him to make new friends. He lets very few people through his "shell" of shyness, but he gives everything to those who does.

As far as zoid battles go, Koru likes to be as far away from his opponents as possible. Weather it’s a couple thousand feet in the air or sniping from a distant, Koru is fine as long as he isn't on the front lines.

Background: Koru grew up in a small village on the western cost of the central continent. Son of a highly esteemed zoid pilot, Koru lived a finically stable life. However, his father, Joneus, traveled to far away lands, defeating zoid pilot after zoid pilot, leave his mother to raise both Koru and his older brother Zachary. Unlike Zachary, Koru quickly inherited his fathers love for zoids. Any zoid battle that took place near his village, Koru was there watching intently.

For Koru's 16th birthday, his father came home to be with his family. On this trip his father brought with him something extra on his Gustav. Koru couldn't believe his eyes when his father told him that the magnificent sapphire blue Ptera Striker was for him! That day was full of happiness, bliss, and learning how to pilot a zoid, however, by night that all changed....

Koru awoke from his sleep that night to a barrage of loud bangs and terrified screams. His whole family quickly rushed outside to seen what was happening. Standing in a heap of flames and destruction was two dark dinosaur-like zoids with glowing red eyes that strike terror to the hearts of everyone. While other local zoid pilots made futile efforts to stop the destruction, Koru, his brother and mother got into the Ptera and his father got into his shadow fox. Joneus told his family to fly as far away as possible. Koru fired up the Pteras and took to the sky with the up most reluctance and flew away as their small village was engulfed in flames....

A year later, Koru and his family had settled in a new village on the western continent. His family is in need of money so Koru must go battle to support his family. Although, he fears leaving his family, his brother assures him he will take care of their mother.....

Appearance: Koru has medium length straight, dark brown hair and Brownish-green eyes that change colors randomly. He is about six feet one inch tall, has an athletic build, and pale skin with a tiny bit of a tan.

Koru’s fashion style is plain, but a bit dark and he like to but an extra twist on things. Usually he’ll wear black or white slip on shoes with jeans and a black or white studded belt. For a top he’ll wear something like a white long sleeve shirt with the left sleeve cut off and a plain black T-shirt over it. Also, he likes to wear some accessories, like maybe a white leather cuff or dog tags.

(YAY! I’m finally done! :P this is one of my first longer rp so go easy on me :) )

Appearance and personality are looking good. Most of the background is, as well.

However, I'm curious about the "bandits destroying the village" event. Are you planning on working this into your roleplaying later on? If not, it would be better to simply omit this. Even if so, it would probably be better to set up any future enemies in a more logical manner. Zi, on this site, is a relatively peaceful place, and there aren't really any rogue Saurers or anything running around blowing up villages.

Other than that, just fix the odd capitalization or spelling mistake here and there and I give you a thumbs' up. Then it's over to Solaris for a more content-oriented critique.

Yay thanks! :D

I just fixed a few spelling/gammer mistakes, though there is probally more because I suck at spelling. You should seen it before i ran it through word hehe.

I see what you mean by the the village being destroyed part. I was thinking of maybe adding that the guys in the suarer's lost a battle or two to koru's father, but destroying an entire village is a bit extreme of a revenge. If I can't think of something to add I'll just rp something like Koru's finds out that some other guy in a shadow fox destroyed the guys in saurers' village.

Heh, we're not that "Mad Max"-ish here, there's very little destroying of villages that goes on. There are, in fact, almost no "villages" any more, they'd all be considered towns, connected by Zi's version of the internet all over the globe. So the mass murder and burning down of an entire village is a pretty huge event, not to be taken lightly.

Actually, your bio is fairly sound anyway, without talk of destroyed villages. There's no real need to 'spice it up' in the bio, as your real roleplaying will take place afterwards. The bio is just a launching pad, something to get your character off the ground and set their basic course.