“Meandering Thoughts”

I glance outside to see the sky
All I see is gray
The world goes on all around me
All I see is gray

Others laughing, enjoying time
I’m lost in pain
Happiness slipping away
I’m lost in pain

The past is lurking, close, deceptive
I’m angry at the world
I try to see the other side
I’m angry at the world

There is no hope, no peace, no love
Time does not heal
I’ve lost all there is to lose
Time does not heal

A brief glimmer here and there
Teasing me to hope
A moment of friendship, joy
Teasing me to hope

Do I give up, do I give in
Can’t you hear my plea
I’ll stand fast through the pain
Can’t you hear my plea

I won’t ask for help, I’m strong
A lie I tell myself
I’ll live through this, save the day
A lie I tell myself

Taru- Ok well this was an attempt to try a new style of poetry. I don’t know if I like the results…I’ll let you figure out who is talking in this one…lol! I don’t know if I should punctuate this, any suggestions?

The punctuation is fine, as is. The poem 'scans'/reads well. :)

I like the repetition elements in this piece. I think they lend weight to the fact that House is caught in certain patterns of thought and behavior that he's having trouble breaking out of or winning free from... And, when someone is in a depressed state, their minds can get 'caught in loops' of thought that they can't get past or break out of... It's a sad and poignant piece. I like it. :)

Hugs,
Sanlin

Thankies...this stuff just sort of escapes, and I never know if I've let out something good or something horrible.

It's alllll good, hon. B) Let those words keep flowing... :)

Hugs,
Sanlin