ok well if anyone does bother to read this i will be grateful
wow i have so little confidence *shakes head*
anyways please don't steal my poems
if you would like to use one however just asked :D :D

~What Would You Do?~

What would you do if life was a myth?
What would you do if it killed you to breathe?
What would you do if cuts appeared on your body but showed no marks?
What would you do if death was always an option?
What would you do if you let yourself bleed just to make sure you exist?
What would you do if you were taken from the arms that could save you and put into the arms that were set to destroy you?
What would you do if shadows covered you during the day?
What would you do if life was a myth and death was always an option?

i know its repetative but i hope that whoever reads this likes it

i would say "well, just another average everyday in the life of me!" *shakes head* okay, perhaps not quite so, drastic...*ponders*

really though, i like it. repetitiveness (grammar is from the devil, remember that lol jp jp) can be a downfall, but it can also have a great effect, in erm, getting a point across...

ur poem hits home, me likes (not that it hits home lol, just that the poem is good)

what i do is more of a... how can i put it *digs out notebook*... see, i tend not to use full sentances, and go off on tangents (sometimes descriptive, sometimes not heh) which keeps my poems from getting too repetivive, but i also get way off topic, so i dunno. i'm rambling, sorry lol *coughs* right then...

thanks for ur reply Jewlez

well i was planning on writing a new poem but...
oh wat the hell here it is hope you like

~Forced~

I am forced to live in this world of technology
To become a mindless drone
To hide emotion and feel numb
To never breathe fresh air
Or swim in clear waters
I am forced
I will never live among those who fight along side nature
I will never live in fantasies
I tell my friends that I'm leaving
They ask why
I simply reply; to breathe...to swim... and to live



hope you liked it :blush:

I liked them!!! I really think you should be more self confident about your talent, coz you have a lot. :bow:

thanks for sharing this, and I hope there's more to come...

What Mena said! I think those are superb, really. You should see what I write, you'd probably curl up to a little ball in some dark corner, or poke me in the eye, lmao. You're a great writer. :love:

thanks u guys
well here is i guess another one

~Leaving~

I have shed every tear in my body
My dreams shattering as each one falls
My body heaving against the coldness of life, just waiting to fall over
My heartbeat becoming weaker, my breathing becoming softer
I am a live, but dead as well
My body decaying inside
My breathing has stopped, my heart isn't moving
I've left this world
Never to return...



hope you like it

I think they are really good, no, let me rephrase that, I KNOW they are very good :)

I partically liked this line from the first poem

That rocked my socks! The other two were superb too, but theres something about this line, and the poem, that made my jaw plummet to the ground.

thank you so much
i'll post more soon if u want anymore

heres another one


Roses

Roses
So beautiful, the perfect form of love in one of Mother Nature’s gift
So beautiful, with a lust for blood
The concoction that allows me to breathe the air you do,
Don’t leave me here with the pollution of the world
Your fragrance keeps my heart bounding
Your green stem in which you lay
Protected by thorns on either side
The killers of love…
Roses…
How innocent that simple word may be
Nature’s beauty at its finest
Nature’s sins at its worst
You’ve prick my finger
A small playful cut with no offence taken
They’re coming love,
I must leave before they kill me
My rose…
My innocent rose…
My gift from Mother Nature…
Your fragrance, your beauty, your thorns
A sin of love, a protector of love
You intoxicate me… but I must leave
Forever…