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Title: Dark Light Tales
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Mena - April 4, 2006 12:54 PM (GMT)
Hello everybody, and welcome to my new story, the Dark Light Tales.

Please, make yourself comfortable because you’ll need it. As you might all well know I cannot go straight to the point to save my life, and also there is something I’d like to share with you before we start.

Fantasy stories have always been among my favorites. I have been wanting to write one for ages, but, to quote the introduction of Stephen King’s ‘Night Shift’ by John D. MacDonald (yeah, I’m playing the educated one here) you cannot write a story without its basic starting point that is, simply, an idea.

The mysterious concept of ‘idea’ is what frustrates an author the most, and until you don’t manage to grasp and identify it, it’s like a fly buzzing in a silent room in a hot day of August (or January if you live in Australia) while you’re studying for a Disease or Etnolinguistics or Engineering test.

My idea came on a dull Monday morning, on the train, on the way to Trieste. I was listening to some music, an album by a band called H.I.M.

The title of the album was Dark Light.

As the songs played on I realized some of them inspired me to write, and as I approached my destination the story took full form in my head, and plots detached more and more from the songs I first based them upon.

Still, they are there. I won’t post the lyrics in the thread, because in the end my plots ended up to be pretty different from them, but I kept their titles, and if you’re interested, you’ll find the link to the lyrics of every song at the bottom of every story.

Of course I don’t own them, but I do own this story. Some plots are not THAT original, but I am quite satisfied with them. So, copyright of Mena, all right reserved and a plague o’ both your houses if you steal.

Mind, I am not Edgar Allan Poe or Anne Rice, or Stephen King or JK Rowling, and this is just a small story.

The male characters are based on famous people, and I don’t own them either. The female characters are based on friends of mine, and I love them heaps and I thank them for being part of this. Still, these are fictional characters with only little reference to the true people they are connected to.

This story is PG-13 rated for violence and peculiar ideas. You’ll find references to religion and to a view of life that I don’t necessarily share. It’s just fiction and in theory a good writer should be able to write about everything… let’s see if I am one.

I want to thank Ambrosia for being, once again, my precious beta reader and inestimable supporter. I am quoting a song by the great Tori, here: You showed me the rope / ropes to climb / over mountains / and to pull myself / out of a landslide.

Three stories of this board inspired me to catch the right atmosphere: Vampirism by Elijahfan14, Chosen by Ninque Elen and Under Your Spell by Ambrosia. I hope I’ll achieve a hint of their greatness because they rock!

And, last but not least, thank you, reader, for being here.

One last dedication before we go: to Dana, who walked through the crimson door.

Ready? Here we go!


Prologue: the girl.

Some nights fall with a purpose.

Sometimes, when the last burning splinter of the apricot sun sinks beyond the horizon line, for only a second it seems to turn into the blinking, conspiratorial eye of a friendly God, turning over to frame you in one last look.

“Farewell,” it says, “Will you be here tomorrow?”

There are nights of azure veils. Even too clear for stars to blossom, they are almost as fair as days. It’s hard to be afraid, on such nights, when all around you nature breathes and sings, delicate, warm, and even in the bleakest corner of the most dangerous city shadows linger lighter, easy and harmless like smoke.

Then, there are nights of velvet vice. All around oxygen bends in heavier folds, not completely transparent, and stars shine proudly like precious diamonds, tossed to form constellations of improbable shape. Shadows grow thicker and whisper seductively where the lights shine, still playful, only an ounce more wicked than before, not confident enough to leap on you.
On other corners, they gather into knots of blackness. They purr like wild cats, deceitfully warm and soft, like wool; but there’s a creepy aura about those corners, voices of long gone deeds, struggling to push you away, screaming out their subtle, desperate warnings.

And lastly, there are nights of pitch.

Stars look weak and cold, mercilessly far away, on nights like this. Their slumbered silver eyes barely open to gaze down on the solitary streets, and there is no warmth in their presence, no help or support.

On those nights, knots of shadow creep from the corners, they join in oil streamlets to fill every ditch, every hole of their viscous onyx fiber. They bulk, twisting, buffing, covering, blinding. Strangling.

Those are nights to die.

It’s on a black night like this that our story began and ended.

It began right here, in this long narrow street, ermined in black robes of night. A solitary street, lined with mute grey buildings, most desolate or hosting creatures that it would be hypocritical to define as men.

It began when some steps echoed down the narrow street. They came from the darkest end, straight opposite the lonesome lamppost leaking its sick light in a puddle on the curb; the steps were quick, determined, and resounded down the street like little regular beats of a drum.

A young woman appeared from the shadows, and this is probably the best moment to start our story.

The name of the woman was Lilith. She was young, and she was not afraid.

That street was not different from many countless ones she walked before. Cement and blackness are just as dangerous as the mind of their beholder, and Lilith knew it. She did not fear the hard bluish sadness of the stone; her eyes had the same color; and her hair was darker than the night around. Just colors, nothing more or less than the simple absence of light.

She proceeded quickly down the narrow street and it snarled and tried to scare her. But, the steel eyes of the young woman could not see its efforts, its wicked tricks. The woman had no magic to protect her, but she had knowledge, and knowledge told her a street, alone, can do no harm.

Lilith was not a witch, or a banshee. She might have been an enchantress, if the Formulae of Change wouldn’t have been destroyed some time about a century before.

But, Lilith was closer to magic than the most people because she studied it, the right way, mixing skepticism with trust inside her head; she knew enough to believe, but she had never seen anything to believe in.

All she had so far was a mind full of names and mysteries that sometimes felt so heavy and painful, longing to shape into questions that thrilled her brain from inside, piercing it to bleed. But when they didn’t hurt, those words were dear to her. With time, she learnt to weave them into a coat, and she wore it proudly under her skin.

It was her knowledge that allowed her to walk so firmly, plunging in the night like a cold little arrow. She knew enough to recognize true danger.

It was more or less half the way through the dark street that the noise of steps doubled.

Lilith, the young woman with pitch black hair, barely lifted her chin from the collar of her coat; her steps slowed, just a little bit.
Another beat resounded behind her. Resolute, easy, regular. Elastic steps of someone else, someone who was not running after her. Someone who was not hiding, either.

If Lilith would have kept on walking, this story would maybe be different. But instead, she made a mistake.

She stopped.






ninque elen - April 4, 2006 02:38 PM (GMT)
I am here.....I am definately here!!!!
I have been dying for you to start posting this cause what I had read so far was mind boggling brilliant. You know I am your fan and I will stay that!

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Mind, I am not Edgar Allan Poe or Anne Rice, or Stephen King or JK Rowling, and this is just a small story.


No you are not. You are you and that is much better.

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Three stories of this board inspired me to catch the right atmosphere: Vampirism by Elijahfan14, Chosen by Ninque Elen and Under Your Spell by Ambrosia. I hope I’ll achieve a hint of their greatness because they rock!


*blushes*
Thanks so much babe. It means incredibly much.
Especially since reading your stories make me want to be a better writer myself cause I think you are so amazingly good.

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One last dedication before we go: to Dana, who walked through the crimson door.


:love: :hug:


Lets start the review *smiles*

First of all I do so love the beginning about the different kind of nights there are. How they make you feel, how they are and what they do. It is such a perfect way to set the mood. To raise a feeling of expectation. It makes me shiver and anxious to read more.

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It began right here, in this long narrow street, ermined in black robes of night. A solitary street, lined with mute grey buildings, most desolate or hosting creatures that it would be hypocritical to define as men.


It fits in every way. People who are there are not really people anymore...or so it seems for us, who live are careful safe organised lifes in the midst of society. They seem to be stuck in between. I also love it as an sort foreboding.

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Cement and blackness are just as dangerous as the mind of their beholder, and Lilith knew it


To true.
Danger is often only in the mind. It is the mind that usally is the biggest danger and leads us astray.

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All she had so far was a mind full of names and mysteries that sometimes felt so heavy and painful, longing to shape into questions that thrilled her brain from inside, piercing it to bleed. But when they didn’t hurt, those words were dear to her. With time, she learnt to weave them into a coat, and she wore it proudly under her skin.


You know what it means :hug: I never met someone who saw so much as you babe.

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Another beat resounded behind her. Resolute, easy, regular. Elastic steps of someone else, someone who was not running after her. Someone who was not hiding, either.


*shivers*
You can build tension dear and there is no mistake about it.

I told you some time ago what this prologue meant to me and I still deeply feel it that way. But even when I let that out then I still see that you wrote a prologue that is promising so much. It alluring and draws me in. There are little sneak previews and small signs to show what to expect. It makes my heart beat faster and the atmosphere is right on. The descriptions are so marvellous and the psychology of your character and the inside you show are profound. For me it breaths everything I hold dear in a story....and I can see that you have a kickass thing going on here. I think mrs. Rice and mr. Poe better be wear.

Love it!
:hug:

ps I am sorry for rambling so much (as usual) :blush:

Bloomiecurse - April 4, 2006 06:11 PM (GMT)
I am scared... and fascinated at the same time. I do want to see where you'll head us to with this new story of yours!
Great beginning!

:angel_devil:

~Jewelz~ - April 4, 2006 07:31 PM (GMT)
Ah, so this is where all these banners lead. I must say, I am impressed, but not too surprised ;) (You are Mena after all- and I've read some of your work before).

Intriguing begining hun- I love the way you draw us in by so beautifully describing the types of night, and then lock us into place by setting us right into the moment that "changed everything."

This Lilith sounds like a facinating character- I envy her attitude toward the things she studies (or, at least, I would if I had chosen to go down that road... long story *laughs*). I cannot wait to see how her pausing leads her into what goes on in this story.

By the way, I also love how you explained your inspiration for the story :) It's cool to know how great minds are inspired ;) Hehehe....

Silly me for diving into yet another story with all that I already have to do/get to read *laughs* Still, I couldn't resist! :laugh:

Tchao

Ambrosia - April 5, 2006 01:59 AM (GMT)
*dances in the ecstasy that is a new Mena story*

You know what this does to me??? I am not sure why, maybe because it is the first time you post a new story in a long while, but it takes me back to the real olden days. Like, the first times I would post on your stories...Forced to Love you and Bloom the Groom. And, I am still struck today with what hit me all those years ago (can you actually believe it has been years) you have this amazing style that can only be called 'Menalicious.' ^_^ It's just something that stunned and amazed me back then, hooking me on your stories and pulling me in...and it keeps me now, in awe and totally thrilled that I get the gift of being allowed to read your work. You have a talent that is unique and rare, and I am so deadly grateful that you share it with us. Goodness, it is a long road that led us here today...a long road from Forced to love you. Who would have thought when I hit that reply button for the first time that it would lead to such a friendship that we have today, a real life meeting in your country, and a support system that is one of the most valuable of my whole life!

Look at me........ :cry: :love: look how mushy you sharing your new baby makes me!!!

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I want to thank Ambrosia for being, once again, my precious beta reader and inestimable supporter. I am quoting a song by the great Tori, here: You showed me the rope / ropes to climb / over mountains / and to pull myself / out of a landslide.


See, its your fault...you started the mushiness with this! I love you!!! :hug:


Okay, okay, now I'll review, I swear it!

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Sometimes, when the last burning splinter of the apricot sun sinks beyond the horizon line, for only a second it seems to turn into the blinking, conspiratorial eye of a friendly God, turning over to frame you in one last look.


Uh, love this much! This is one of the prime examples of Menalicious style that I have come to admire so much over the years. Its lines like these that make me smile and nod, knowing that only someone like you could create such a glowing description. It is just something I would never think of, but when you mention it, I can imagine the sun blinking one last time as it sets, giving one last look. Just beautiful.

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Then, there are nights of velvet vice. All around oxygen bends in heavier folds, not completely transparent, and stars shine proudly like precious diamonds, tossed to form constellations of improbable shape. Shadows grow thicker and whisper seductively where the lights shine, still playful, only an ounce more wicked than before, not confident enough to leap on you.


Oh! You know, this is how I thought of last night when I was leaving my Kinetics test at ten PM and had parked way far away from the building. The streets were empty, the parking lots desolate, and only my footsteps (sequin silver heels) tapping against the dark sidewalk. It was creepy and I totally felt like Lillith, you know! The shadows definitely were playing with the idea of jumping out at me.

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She was young, and she was not afraid.


Glee! How great is that line....its simple, yet it says so much!

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But when they didn’t hurt, those words were dear to her. With time, she learnt to weave them into a coat, and she wore it proudly under her skin.


This part was super cool. Just wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed it. :yes:

Okay, I shall end in saying how excited I am that you posted this and how super pumped I am for everyone to read the unique stories as they unfold. I am pumped!!!


Airefeaiel - April 5, 2006 05:32 AM (GMT)
OOOOOH, you have some nerve, Anna! Ending it like that! :lol:

I must say that I feel like your ending is Karma for my As Said Apollo chapters where things end so suspensefully.

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Some nights fall with a purpose.


Best starting line, EVER.

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Then, there are nights of velvet vice. All around oxygen bends in heavier folds, not completely transparent, and stars shine proudly like precious diamonds, tossed to form constellations of improbable shape. Shadows grow thicker and whisper seductively where the lights shine, still playful, only an ounce more wicked than before, not confident enough to leap on you.
On other corners, they gather into knots of blackness. They purr like wild cats, deceitfully warm and soft, like wool; but there’s a creepy aura about those corners, voices of long gone deeds, struggling to push you away, screaming out their subtle, desperate warnings.


That painted the scene really well, dear.

It's fun to see your fics, Amber's, Jaime's and Blondie's, because even though you all use each other as characters, your characters are never exactly the same and it's refreshing.

:heartbeat: Pat

More soon, please.

Jaime Girl - April 5, 2006 07:44 AM (GMT)
SQUEE!!! It's up and I love it!!

As usual I feel like a wanker 'cuz I'm not gonna quote, but the fact is that I never know what TO quote with your fics, 'cuz there's just so much in every line. But I love love LOVE the poetic brilliance of the first few paragraphs about night, and the introduction to this protagonist...all those hints at mysticism without actually letting us know what's going on are absolutely brilliant!!!

You know I'll be reading and you know I love you and that I love THIS already!!

*hugs*

Skilos - April 5, 2006 10:57 AM (GMT)
Ooooooooooooh the things to come....
Yummy can't wait to read more.

Get this baby on the road, whohooo

Pippinslova - April 6, 2006 02:08 PM (GMT)
Goodness gracious!! :scare
Dana told me this was good, but she didn't tell me it was THIS good!!! I'm scared :eeek: and yet.. excited and I'm sensing this incredible need for more of your excellent writing!
It's great to see how you've captured the surrounding, how you've lead us into the night, where this story takes place. I'm overly impressed, girl!
So.. how bout some more eh? ;) I'll be reading, you can bet on it! :yahoo comeon

xxx
Petra

Elijahs Girl - April 6, 2006 04:09 PM (GMT)
And Yes I'm here as well. This is a Mena story after all.
That first part was WOW.. it simply blew my mind away.
It's dark but most definitely interesting. I'm intrigued :unsure:
Can't wait to read how is this fic going to develope.

So glad you star a new story!!
Love, Rocio! :love:

Mena - April 7, 2006 11:35 AM (GMT)
Gosh, girls, you're too kind to me!! You really cannot imagine how good it feels to see all of your comments lied down here all nice for me. I am so used so far to be more a reader than a writer that I must admit it feels good to be the dancing queen once again.

I am going to reply to some of your posts, because they made me wear the hugest grin ever on my face when I read them:

To Roxie, Petra, Jewelz, Pat and Skilos: I am so flattered that you're reading! I have the bad tendency to crap for years and years with my stories, but this time I have been a good girl and wrote all the 8 chapters planned. I hope this won't disappoint you!

To Jess:

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As usual I feel like a wanker 'cuz I'm not gonna quote, but the fact is that I never know what TO quote with your fics, 'cuz there's just so much in every line.

ahahah, babe, it's true that you never quote, but you're always there for me (death menaces included for me to post new stuff) so honstly, could I ask for more? You know how much I care about your opinion!

To Dana:

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Thanks so much babe. It means incredibly much.
Especially since reading your stories make me want to be a better writer myself cause I think you are so amazingly good.

You know you have been helping me heaps and heaps with your support and your killer analysis! I am such a sucker for your comments, you always manage to find deep meanings I would NEVER think about! You push me to write more and better, and you're always there to hear me daydream about my freakish stuff. I would not be the same if you weren't here.

To Ursi:
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I do want to see where you'll head us to with this new story of yours!

*giggles* considering I almost DEMANDED your partecipation, I am so happy to see you're reading! I hope you'll stick around despite your engagements, because I am quite happy about the chapter your character is in... but I gotta warn you it's towards the end, so, stay in, will you?

And eventually, my Ambra:
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You know what this does to me??? I am not sure why, maybe because it is the first time you post a new story in a long while, but it takes me back to the real olden days. Like, the first times I would post on your stories...Forced to Love you and Bloom the Groom. And, I am still struck today with what hit me all those years ago (can you actually believe it has been years) you have this amazing style that can only be called 'Menalicious.'  It's just something that stunned and amazed me back then, hooking me on your stories and pulling me in...and it keeps me now, in awe and totally thrilled that I get the gift of being allowed to read your work. You have a talent that is unique and rare, and I am so deadly grateful that you share it with us. Goodness, it is a long road that led us here today...a long road from Forced to love you. Who would have thought when I hit that reply button for the first time that it would lead to such a friendship that we have today, a real life meeting in your country, and a support system that is one of the most valuable of my whole life!

I danced and giggled and whined over this! I texted Elisa because I wanted her to know how happy you made me... who would have thought, indeed, when I begged you to send me Friends because I wanted to catch up with it, that I would have ended up relying on you so much, rust you and respect you the way I do?
heck, I would not have lied to my parents and travelled for 700 KM to meet many online friends... but you are worth everything!

And, glad you enjoyed the silent dark street part... how I can relate to it! I should have picked up an apartment in a more lit area, I think sometimes.

Pheeewww, I'm done for now.

So, since it's precious Dana's birthday, I guess I could post more as a small present for her and for ya'll.

On to introduce some new character!

Chapter one: Behind the crimson door (the girl and the vampire).

The moment she stopped, she realized she had to turn over and check the person behind her, to see if they were scared, or not; dangerous, or not; needing her help, or not.

So, she turned over in the black street. The thin, old lamppost was behind her shoulders now, so that its weak light barely fell to brush past her, seeding on the ground. She stood still, framed in the weak glow, and for a moment she wondered if the person could see her, with her black clothes and raven hair in the dark of the street, and mostly, framed in a light too fragile, but surely disturbing.

When Lilith’s eyes crossed the ones of her follower, an absurd truth dashed through her brain:
“Such creatures don’t need light to see.”

Someone else, who didn’t know all she knew would have seen just a young man. He was standing in the short distance, and the tired light barely touched his thin face. He had dark hair and eyes, and a light, nonchalant smile that seemed to match the haunting tranquility of the street.
Someone else would have seen this all, but only in a moment, because they would have died before noticing more, without a scrap of knowledge of the cause of their sudden death.

But, Lilith knew more. She had never seen such a creature before, but she knew it was not a man. Oh, he was eons far from humanity! She saw it in the glow of his eyes, in his carriage that was too graceful for such a place: his arms were crossed too easily over a chest that didn’t heave with fear.
In a moment, she knew the creature had fangs hiding under his thin smiling lips, fangs that soon would have sunk into her flesh.

She knew she was about to die, and this saved her life, because vampires like the one that was looking at her are rarely recognized before they choose to reveal themselves; what Lilith didn’t know, or maybe she forgot when panic finally hit her, is that vampires love to be recognized. They are vain, lustful creatures who enjoy savoring a moment of celebrity when they are given it. It’s just a moment, but it was enough.

Lilith ran.

She turned away and ran down the silent street, the crazed peel of her footsteps exploded against the mocking walls, but once again, despite the street didn’t like her and it hoped the vampire would reach and kill her, she was lucky.

She had been lucky enough to recognize him, and then, the street unconsciously helped her.

The sad lamppost stood bent just before a door, like an unworthy guardian. It seemed to be struggling to keep its lights up, to highlight that door out of the blackness around. The weak light was not enough to push away the shadows in the street, so it devotedly aimed at the crimson door, licking its dirty surface.

Lilith jerked abruptly to her right, bumping against the door. There was nothing rational in what she did, she did not hope for the door to open; actually, she was not even thinking. Her mind was blank, like the solitary street before and behind her belonged to another place or time. She was not looking for help when she plunged past the crimson door into the small room. She didn’t even consider that she needed help. It all happened too fast: she saw the vampire, she recognized him, and she ran a couple of steps away from him. The weak light hit the crimson door on her right, and she dove through it.

Blindly, she stumbled ahead, her head tilted down towards the ground to rule her unsteady breath. The first thing she saw was her pale hands, propped on her knees. She was bent down, and out of the corner of her eye was a tawny floor.

Lilith stretched back up, and she held her breath.
Before her wide eyes there was a room. It would not have been hard to describe it, if her blood didn’t roar so wildly in her ears, veiling her eyes. She closed them, opened them again, still, in the middle of the room.

Her eyesight was still veiled at the brims, and the space around her looked morphed into some sort of strange tunnel vision; it had an eerie air about, she thought frantically, glancing at the wooden panels of the walls. A few chandeliers spread around a bronze, heavy light, not painful at all to look at, not strong enough to give clarity yet. It was more like puffs of golden smoke filled the space, and for a moment she thought she could smell it.

Far on the left side was a bench, long and polished, and behind it a huge shelf stood to cover the whole wall. Bottles of all sorts were doubled in the reflection of the mirror that made the shelf, but – Lilith suddenly cringed, reflections gleamed grimly in the bronze light, because the big mirror, of a deep crimson shade, locked them like they were flickering under the blood-tainted waters of a placid lake.

“It’s a tavern.” The lucid sentence made her somersault like the voice in her head did not belong to her. “It’s a tavern for all creatures.”

There, Lilith’s clever mind pierced itself and obediently squirmed words out of it: she knew that kind of place, albeit she had never seen one before. Scraps of long-forgotten lessons came back to her mind, as the voice in her head recited them clearly:
“All around the world venues are said to exist where all kinds of creatures can gather and seek relief. All throughout the centuries these places stood as highlights amid the fights among species, changing their name and location but never faltering in their purpose: to stand as idle islands of peace where nobody is ever unwelcome or uninvited, and as long as a pilgrim seeks protection inside one of these places, no harm can be done to them, with no distinction of race or blame.”

She took a deep breath. She could hear a soft buzz noise of voices all around, but her eyes remained fixed on the red mirror behind the bench. Like pulled by a leash, she moved on to it, and only when she sensed the smooth warmth of the wood under her hands and against her legs, she stopped.
The woman in the mirror looked resolutely calm, under her crimson drag. Lilith moved slightly to catch a better vision of herself, past the bottles on the glassy shelf. Her lips parted, eyes widened, and she could not help but lift a hand and touch her own face, lost in stupor.

“Beautiful, yes,” a voice nudged her at once, and she gave a little startled sigh, when her eyes darted to frame the woman standing on the other side of the bench.
Lilith frowned while looking at her.

The woman smiled quietly back, and something knavish shimmered in her eyes. Lilith was aware of staring, and yet, she could not help it.

The woman looked young, her skin was smooth and bare of wrinkles, but yet, there was something old about her, a sort of disheveled tiredness beating under the luminosity of her ivory skin.
She had tousled, bright red hair that fell in curls past her shoulders like a mane. For a moment, in the bronze light, some curls seemed to squirm like shining, little worms, twisting to bite the suffocating air, before the woman brushed them off her face.

She had a perfect body, Lilith noticed with a bit of sufficiency – maybe it was this awareness preventing her from hiding it properly. Her clothes looked so old and tattered that they might have fallen off her at any time, and the gray shirt had holes in one sleeve, while the other was not there at all.

Lilith’s eyes reluctantly followed the line of her cleavage, cut deep, and she spotted a bright red rose, skillfully tattooed right above the heart of the woman.

“Excuse me,” the woman called, claiming her eyes and attention back on her face, and Lilith noticed once more the heavy makeup that made her look so real – and so coarse.
“Can I help you?” the bartender, because she obviously was one, addressed to her in a polite voice; but still, there was a hint of amusement that Lilith couldn’t help but notice.

“I… there was…” she began, slightly shifting aback towards the door. She suddenly felt stupid. It didn’t matter that she knew what kind of place it was - she was deadly sure of it. She could not find the words to explain how she, regular Lilith with too many stories and information in her head, was being hunted by a…
“…v-vampire,” she choked out, collapsing on the nearest barstool as the word left her mouth, like she had ripped it from her lips with a last ounce of strength.

The eyes of the bartender danced on her face. Looked like she was having a jolly good time. She made as to say something, when, with a sinister creak and a whirl of chilled air, the crimson door opened again.

Lilith did not need to turn over. The red mirror slapped the image inside her wide eyes, and she almost fell from her seat. She gripped frantically the edge of the bench, her eyes dug deep into the red reflection, and her heart skipped a beat when the man who just entered lifted his glance and crossed hers, inside the mirror.

It was the creature of the street, she realized, and she noticed, surprised, how she could not feel afraid or worried when the realization struck her. She kept on staring at his face in the mirror, watching him walk closer, until he stopped by the bench and sat down a couple of seats away.

Slowly, Lilith’s head turned to the side, as a voice inside her whispered urgently that she had to be aware, she was leaving the sight of him in the mirror to look at his true face, and maybe, without the soothing morph of the glass, it wouldn’t have been so easy.

She tilted her head in his direction, and like she had dived into an icy pool – or a scorching one, she couldn’t tell, the ancient spell of captivation folded around her and sunk into her mind.
“Mesmerize”, the voice in her head said feebly, “that’s how this kind of hypnosis is called; a state of deep, semi-conscious stupor that affects the nervous system, faltering the will.”
Lilith’s lips parted slowly, her head swung. She scrolled it, eyelids flickering, trying to cling to the voice in her head, to the rational information it brought along.
“Vampires are known to use mesmerization to surrender their victims to a passive acceptance. Plainest forms of mesmerization are also use by other kind of creatures such as Enchantresses, Sirens, snakelike mutants, and Lamias. Counter-spells are scarce. Heliotropes, mystic alchemic-created stones, have the power to contrast the effects of mesmerization because they adopt the same principles, but they are extremely hard to find since the XIV century…”

“What’s your name?” a voice snuck through the layers of her unconscious, insubstantial like a dream, but surely alien.

“Lilith,” she said, barely conscious her lips didn’t move. But, this simple reflexive act stirred something inside her, waking her from the magical slumber, and she jerked back from it inside her mind: at once she saw the trap closing on her, and she struggled and twisted to release herself. The spell broke, and she found herself sitting on the barstool, staring at the vampire from behind her clear eyes.

He smirked, staring at her curiously, and she could look at him for the first time: he looked like a young man with a thin face, and dark, smoldering eyes that held on her a cold glance, like she wasn’t more human than he, like she was, actually, nothing more than an odd shaped craft he was examining closely.

The vampire smirked again, and his eyes left her casually, just like they would have left an inanimate tool, and he turned his head away from her, stretching to lean on the bench to address the bartender, who unfolded her cunning smile.
“I knew it was you, Stuart,” she said lightly, friendly. But, there was no friendly warmth in her voice.

The vampire nodded casually, registering her known, weak interest.
“How are you going, Dixie?”

Dixie, the bartender, smirked again, glancing at Lilith out the corner of her eye.
“You know you cannot touch her as long as she’s here, I cannot let you do it;” she spoke like Lilith wasn’t there, or she could not understand. The vampire did not even turn his face to look and Lilith swallowed painfully.

“I can wait. You still close an hour before sunrise, don’t you?”

His words sunk deep into Lilith’s brain, and her heart increased its beat to a frantic galloping. So, this was it: in a few hours she would walk out, the ruthless vampire on her heels, and she would die just outside that crimson door like she had foreseen in that split instant in the open when their eyes first crossed.

She was impressed to know she was not afraid. A weak, humble acceptance swarmed inside her soul, and her shoulders hunched just a little bit, breath exiting her lungs in a small sigh.

“She’s beautiful,” Dixie the bartender was saying, staring at her openly, bluntly.

“She’s food,” the vampire retorted without looking at her.

“Did you hear that?” the bartender turned to face the girl. She, too, leaned in on the bench, so close that her hair brushed Liith’s cheeks when the breath of the woman shuffled them on. Her eyes were thundering, framed in the pitched eyelids.
“Lilith, right?” her red lips parted in a cold smile. There was no sympathy on her face, no warmth in the sound of her voice; she was cold, beautiful, and aloof like winter.

“Do you know what place this is?” the bartender asked kindly, and her eyes narrowed and widened again. She tilted even closer, bending her head in a conspiratorial way.
But, conspiracy cannot exist without sympathy, and Lilith was aware the movements of the woman were nothing more than a calculated, theatrical flair.
“Did you hear what Stuart said?” she asked again, lightly, playfully, “He is not going to repeat it; actually, he won’t talk to you. I’m sure you felt it, when you looked at him – the rapture. They can be so sweet when they want to, they could kill without their victims knowing, just trapping them down into bliss. But, they never do it, and, you know why? Because they are bastards.”

Lilith’s eyes were lost in the ones of the woman. They were a grey sky graded in sea tides. And yet, despite she felt herself drowning deeply, she wondered whether the vampire sitting quietly beside her smiled at those words. As the watery eyes pulled her in, she realized he did.
“He never talks to his victims, little Stuart,” the woman pursued her lips in a mocking smile, “He doesn’t like to know the name of the cow he’s slaughtering. But sure enough, he’ll wait for you. He won’t try to fool your mind with his blood-sucker tricks, can’t you see? You’re his own already. You’re dead.”

“But… you…” Lilith trailed off, straightening up on the barstool, and inside her something leapt to shout an order: touch the woman. But, her hand froze midair, stopped by fear, fascination and disgust.

“You know that this kind of place is a supernatural replica of human saloons?” the bartender asked out of the blue. She moved back, and a smile broke on her lips. She smoothed the clean bench, pensively, “If one cowboy, just one, whipped out his gun, everybody did the same. And, you know what happened then?”
Her eyes shone of the coldest light ever, “Every good bartender had a rifle under their bench. One gun out, and – bang bang - they were all dead.”

She smiled radiantly, like she just shared a beautiful tale. Her burning eyes wandered about the room, slowly, dramatically, obedient little guides, and Lilith shifted slightly on her stool to follow her glance.
“There are five tables here, do you see?” she pointed a pale, long-nail topped finger at a random dark spot, and hooked it back like angling for shadows, “There is a vampire, a wizard, a demon, and a werewolf, just to name some. I won’t mess up the night of my patrons by sticking up for a vampire’s meal.”

Her reddened lips trembled down in the pale face. She looked like a monstrous, possessed porcelain doll.
“Lilith… poor Lilith. There’s an ill-fated pattern with this name, you know? You can never blend with light, if you bear a name like this. So, mind a tip, Lilith?”
She stepped back, and placed an empty glass on the bench with a soft thud. When Lilith’s eyes left the faceless people sitting at the tables to look at it again, it was filled to the brim with a pitch-black syrup.

“Drink this,” the bartender pushed the heavy glass in her direction, “It’s called Shadows.”
She watched Lilith gingerly lift the glass, an eloquent frown on her face. Of course, she was going to drink; what could happen? Was she to get poisoned?
She felt the vampire looking at her and she hid her face in the glass.

“It’s tasteless,” she choked, off guard, and the bartender laughed cunningly, with only a bit of sufficiency.

“Shadows always are. But, have no fear, it will go straight to your head,” she moved another step back, closer to the red mirror.

“Now, little Lilith, take your glass and sit at somebody’s table. Go talk to them, they won’t hurt you,” she smiled her cold, emotionless smile once again, “Go share your life with this stock of doomed ones; this will be the most interesting night of your life, let alone the last. Go, you’re dying already.”

Lilith did not reply.

Every thought inside her head had frozen at the contact with those icy eyes. She eyed the door, more as a matter of instinct than for a true purpose. She knew what was going to happen: in a few hours, the vampire that hadn’t even bothered looking at her would have taken her life, and all she could feel was a wide, beguiled stupor sucking away her mind will. She could not escape, and nobody was going to help her.

Dixie, the bartender, was right: she was dying already, and she had no power or will to refrain it from happening.

With a deep breath, she clutched the glass in a hand and headed for the closest table.

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Song related to this chapter: H.I.M., Behind the crimson door.

~Jewelz~ - April 7, 2006 09:17 PM (GMT)
:eek: Woahhh....

Intense. And awesome!! *is suffering from writer's envy* Hehehe... brilliant! I can't wait to find out the stories she hears. Of course, I hope she's able to escape *sigh* But either way....wow....

*sits down and grabs a plate of cookies for story time* :D

Can't wait for more; Ttfn....

ninque elen - April 8, 2006 10:49 AM (GMT)
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So, since it's precious Dana's birthday, I guess I could post more as a small present for her and for ya'll.


:love: I love your presents and this one is a bloody awesome present to!

You know I how awesome I find this chapter. There is so much that I love, the descriptions, the encounter, the dialogue, the puur brilliance of the plot and the way it all unravels. I told you how I saw all light references...and there are many.
Light has always been a synonym for goodness, for purity, for life.
Darkness is it's opposite, death, decay, evil.
Lillith steps from under the light into the dark when she runs, the light of the lamppost shows her a way to life some more.
But it shows a bloodred door which is a mirror image of the bloodred mirror inside. It is a forevboding. And bloodred has the word blood in it...another foreboding of the treath, of the vampire that will hunt her down.

Now there is also a mirror...and mirrors are usually powerful images in literature. The mirror here reminds me of Lacan's mirrorstage. I am not sure if you know it so I will give a brief and rather crude explanation. The mirrorfase is a fase in the development of a child. Before the mirror fase (till a year of 3) the child perceives himself there where he feels himself. The world is magical and everyone is an extension (to the child) from himself. In the mirrofase the child learns to recognise himself, image and the self become seperated. After this fase the child enters the "world of the law and language. The mirrorfase is thus a transistion.

Now the mirror in this story is a signifier of transition. Lillith enters a different world, she begins to learn to rules of this world. For the first time in the story she speaks and she becomes divided from the world she previously knew. She encounters another world and is on the treshold of a new experience. The mirror...a bloodred mirror signifies change works as a foreboding for the vampire and his treath of death (which is ultimately the biggest transition ever) However vampires usually stand for sexuality to......so it can mean there is a different transition waiting.

:meh: I think I have rambled quite enough but I hope I showed you that your stories do contain a lot and that there is reason for me to call them literature.

Putting this all aside however I just have to say that your story enthralls me and that I am very impressed with how you write.
Love it!
:hug:


Mena - April 8, 2006 12:04 PM (GMT)
:eek: :eek:
*pats Dana on the head*

Look how clever my baby is!!


gosh, your reply left me with my mouth hanging open, literally. I honestly don't know how you come up with such replies, but their effect is stunning. What can i say? I am grateful beyond word, and I love them to bits!!

And Jewelz, glad you're liking this too! :hug:

Jaime Girl - April 9, 2006 10:43 AM (GMT)
Wow, what a world you've created here, along with some incredibly vivid characters. I love love love Dixie the bartender, and how you've described her....it would be so easy to have her all tough-looking in black leather, but you've played down her image a little...love it!

:love:

Bloomiecurse - April 9, 2006 08:00 PM (GMT)
*read it yesterday but had no time to reply*

**honestly I remained speechless, so that's why I came back here today to try and articulate a decent reply**

Wow! It is scaringly awesome! Honestly... I kind of doubt that Lilith will be Stuart's dinner, Dixie seems quite the smart chick here... I loved the atmosphere, this wonderful mix between the Victorian London of Sherlock Holmes and Jack The ripper and Anne Rice's novels... and the plot, also, is quite intriguing... I guess Lilith will learn a lesson from each creature at whose table she'll be sitting at and escape Stuart... or probably I have not understood anything and the only thing I need to do is staying tuned and read your gem!

:bow:

Ambrosia - April 10, 2006 12:58 AM (GMT)
*waltzes in*

Now, I remember the first time I read this chapter and how I was just hanging on the edge of my seat and watching the computer screen with my mouth hanging open and my eyes bugging wide. See, when I read words like this, I'm holding onto them, falling into the story and completely letting it take over my mind. You have always had the ability to transport me away from my little apartment and into your world of imagination and for that I love you. It is so good to read your writing and have an escape into a place that is beautifully painted with unique and lovely descriptions.

First, I adore the whole idea behind the place behind the crimson door...it is a really creative idea, to create this tavern where all creatures could be safe, so long as it is open, at least. Poor Lilith, it is bad luck, after all, that the place must close an hour before dawn. I would wonder how I would feel in her situation...whether I would be thankful for a few more hours of life, or just be angry that now I had to wait for death, instead of it coming in a rush of unexpectedness. It'll be interesting to find out how she feels in the end.

Now, Stuart...I like how he dismisses her as food, how he just seems so cold and uncaring. The silent, patient figure just waiting to kill...very ruthless and scary!

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Lilith suddenly cringed, reflections gleamed grimly in the bronze light, because the big mirror, of a deep crimson shade, locked them like they were flickering under the blood-tainted waters of a placid lake.


I adored this description, because I could just picture it so well. I want crimson mirrors in my pharmacy someday, with all the bottles of meds stacked against them. ahahaha!

Now, there is something about Dixie...I can't put my finger on it. She's cold and callous, yet she also seems to enjoy these interactions with Lilith in a cryptic way. I think she quite liked informing Lilith that she would die and there was no permanent relief for her in the tavern. But, she still urges her to at least live up her last few hours, so that is very interesting....hmm.

psst..I love the drink called Shadows and how it tastes like nothing.

Skilos - April 10, 2006 09:11 PM (GMT)
:eek: :cry:

She can't die, and damn why are the fang faces always so cute.
No fair, it makes it an uneven fight.
Be honest know we would all run away faster from Mickey Rourke that we would from Mr Townsend, don't you agree.

But Mena you write so well. I can easily write a 3 page accolade, but it would all be superlatives for the following: You are so good, probably even orgasmic LOL

Elijahfan14 - April 11, 2006 01:53 AM (GMT)
MARY, MOTHER OF JOSEPH!!
I can't believe I didn't read this sooner. I was so excited for this to start and look at me coming in late like this?

This is BRILLIANT!!! I was so enraptured by this whole thing. I was mesmerized! Teehee...

First off...
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Three stories of this board inspired me to catch the right atmosphere: Vampirism by Elijahfan14, Chosen by Ninque Elen and Under Your Spell by Ambrosia. I hope I’ll achieve a hint of their greatness because they rock!

Thanks so much for that. It really makes you feel appreciated when someone says that their story helped inspire someone else.

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psst..I love the drink called Shadows and how it tastes like nothing.

I second this thought!
So creative.

Gosh! I just can't wait for more!!

:hug:
~Stacy~


Mena - April 12, 2006 02:12 PM (GMT)
Weee, Stacyyy! :hug:
I am so happy you are reading and liking this! You have never been in one of my stories before, and I seriously freaked that you might not like this!

And, Moon, your comment made me laugh so!
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She can't die, and damn why are the fang faces always so cute.
No fair, it makes it an uneven fight.
Be honest know we would all run away faster from Mickey Rourke that we would from Mr Townsend, don't you agree.
:lmao:
So true, girl, so true!!

okay, time for another update. This is Blondie's chapter, so, honey, I hope you'll read this (I know how busy you are) and like it. I'm thinking of you!


Chapter two: the face of God. (the girl, the artist and his muse).

Later that evening, Lilith stopped to ponder how the different patrons of that neglected pub had unconsciously chosen seats placed in corners that somehow suited both their personality and moods.

She realized, likewise, how the frozen stupor that had seemed to take over her when she left the polished bench, disengaging her wide eyes from the red mirror, seemed to wash over her in weaker tides, as a clock chimed, inflexible, minute by minute.

All these thoughts crossed her head like fireflies, equally small and easily crushed, equally evanescent and cold in their feeble light. They lingered through the high hedgerows that once were her convictions, leaves of thought dangling now dry, falling softly to the ground, plucked to strip the branches naked.

But, the night had just begun when Lilith’s eyes landed on the closest table, and none of these thoughts had yet crossed her mind. The green maze of her brain was still flourishing, intact.

She didn’t know it, but she was lucky to reach that table first. Or, maybe luck had nothing to do with it, simply, it was the one standing closest to the bench, almost at the centre of the room, fully stroked by the smoky light. Three steps did to get her closer. She stood there, clutching the glass in her hand, watching the couple sitting before her.

There was no doubt they were a couple. Maybe out of this realization, an unpleasant feeling of intruding nudged her, and she glanced shiftily about. It was then that she noticed something peculiar: there were, as Dixie said, five tables, and each and every one was occupied by a couple. A man and a woman sat together, and the sensation grew slightly stronger inside Lilith’s mind, churned in her stomach and curved down the corners of her lips.
On her left, a young woman smoothed the hand of her companion, openly and softly on the table. Her face was titled down, bent towards him, and he raised his eyes to shoot her a reassuring smile.

Beyond, near the left corner, sat a man and a girl with red hair. She was giving her back to Lilith, and her shoulders seemed to move slightly in the greasy distance, like she was shivering.

The two tables at the corners were scarcely illuminated. There, men and women did not touch.

Lilith sighed slightly, when her eyes left the last table and fell on the couple sitting before her, but as they did so, her heart gave a weak, tired leap, because the man was staring right into her face.

He wasn’t very young. Wrinkles rippled the corners of his eyes and mouth, and his fair hair was starting to gray. He had clear, pale eyes that lit up slightly when they met hers, and Lilith felt there was something comforting in his displayed age, something safe: that man was alive. Maybe not human, but he surely had blood flowing in his veins, invisible pores on his skin, and his hands were warm.

Suddenly, it was enough.

“Good evening,” he said softly, and smiled.

There was something, in the way he said those words; kindly, politely, like they meant more than an empty greeting. The man smiled at Lilith as he spoke, the kind of smile aimed at people you know, people you love, people you wish would come and sit at your table. It was probably in the power of that smile and those words that Lilith’s knees buckled, and she fell heavily on the vacant chair.

“It isn’t,” she replied quietly, surprised, once again, that her voice carried no trace of turmoil.

“What?” the man asked gently, frowning.

“A good evening,” Lilith explained softly, and the rational side of her mind noticed, alarmed, that she smiled saying it.
“My name is Lilith,” she went on, stretching her hand, “Can you see that man at the bench? He is a vampire, and he is going to kill me in a while; I didn’t ask for it, you see; I know some do… but, I didn’t. And the bartender, over there, the woman with the rose tattoo, told me to come here and talk to her patrons. I’m sorry, I know I am saying nonsense, but he was so scary and looked at me like I was even less human than he is, and she seemed to be enjoying it. It was humiliating, but then you smiled at me and this touched me, somehow. Do you think I am insane?”

The man did not smile. He bit his bottom lip in a pondering gesture, and he answered just a split second later than how it would take to lie.
“No, I don’t. Nobody here would think you’re insane; after all, we got here before you,” he smiled again, and leaned in to shake her hand.
“My name is Viggo,” he turned his head to the left, and Lilith cringed. She was fully aware there was someone else, sitting at that table, but for an instant she had forgotten about it, and now she felt stupid.
“And, this is Amaris,” Viggo added slowly.

Lilith frowned. ‘Amaris’ was a beautiful young woman, and she was sleeping soundly, resting with her face tilted aside on her naked arms on the surface of the table. She had fairy, long blonde hair that covered her only exposed cheek, and a lock by her mouth moved rhythmically, imperceptibly lifted by the shuffle of her breath.

She looked even too pure for that place, Lilith thought watching the sleeping woman. Unconsciously, she reached a hand to smooth her shimmering hair, but stopped.
Viggo, instead, dived his open hand into it, covering her head in a light, circular stroke, fingers disappeared into the golden cascade, and Lilith wondered, stupidly, if they’d turn to gold once he retrieved them.
“Why are you here?” she asked, looking at the sleeping girl. She maybe meant to sound only polite, but there was a heavy awareness in her tone, the full realization that those two warm, light-cored people were there for a purpose.

Viggo looked at her, but the smile did not leave his lips. He did not nod to show he shared her awareness, but the girl felt he did. When he turned to caress the head of Amaris again, taking the deep breath of someone who is about to talk, Lilith understood he was not going to give her a short answer, he was going to tell her everything, in detail, about himself and the girl sleeping by his side, bent like a neglected ray of light out of a cloud. He was going to tell her everything because it was her last night, and he was a kind man.

“We don’t go out very often,” he began in a slow, pensive voice, still looking at Amaris’s hair shuffled by her breath, “when we do, it’s always at nighttime, and we usually pick up quiet places. Sometimes, I use the car, I lift Amaris in my arms and lay her on the passenger’s side. When I walk, she follows me in sleep, but I try to avoid it.”

“I don’t understand,” Lilith said quietly.

Viggo’s eyes left the gleaming head of the girl and framed Lilith.
“You’re right, sorry. Let me start again,” he smiled a bit wider, “I am an artist. Not the kind of artist that is persuaded to be one, I really am one. Amaris is my muse.”

“Your muse,” Lilith repeated flatly.

“My muse, my inspiration. She is not my girlfriend or my wife, someone I met who helps to feed my imagination. That is a poetic use of the word. She is my true muse. Not human, not alive, even if she ages as I do.”

“I believe you,” Lilith said slowly, and she placed her hands on the table to prove the sincerity of her words, “I am here, I cannot but believe you. But, I can’t understand.”

Viggo looked at her.
“It’s an eerie place, this one, isn’t it? I’ve always been thinking a spell was cast on the threshold of that crimson door, because once you step past it, you can believe everything. Or maybe it’s just that you can’t do otherwise once you see what kind of creatures lurk here. You are being hunted by a vampire, so I am prone to accept that yes, you believe me. I don’t mind telling you about Amaris and me, if you want to hear. Are you sure you don’t want to have a quick look around?”

Lilith scrolled her head, and in that move he understood that she didn’t want to leave that seat in the warm light, that man who was speaking so softly to her, or the girl with daylight hair.

“Fine,” he said.

“Since I was a child, I could see things the others could not. I don’t think they were clear visions at first… it was more like a presence, something intangible. Light was a bit clearer in some spots, and I could sense something brush past me sometimes. Then, I started to hear voices, a random word out of a sentence, or a light laughter. It was only when I turned ten years old that I understood it was always the same voice.
I was not afraid. At first the voice did not properly talk to me. It just spoke some words, but they were not casual or random like it seemed. They were precise advice, and they all revolved around one matter: art.
From the start, I showed a pointed aptitude towards various forms of art. I learned to draw before I wrote, and I memorized music before I walked. I could remember long, complex poems with ease. At twelve years old, I could write music.
So, this voice was always there, helping me, whispering in my ear what to do. A note, a particular shade of blue on my canvas, the word I missed to complete a sonnet, it slid them all into my ear. I don’t think…”

Viggo paused for a moment, and on his face spread a pensive, serious irony, like he wasn’t yet quite persuaded of what he was going to say.
“I don’t think I ever believed I was insane. My family tree was full of what my mother called ‘artists’, that was something I was born with, and if you think about it, Lilith, nobody worries about having a peculiarity if the people around them don’t do it first. My family never questioned I had an eye-open on higher inspiration. I don’t know what they pictured it like, but as long as they praised my work, hang my portraits on the wall, played my music, we never went further on the subject.”

“At fourteen years old, I realized I could talk to the voice, and that she answered me. I am saying ‘she’, because it was surely the voice of a girl. She replied to my questions in a friendly, cheerful tone, and we spent hours conversing when we were alone. She was invisible, still, and she told me nobody else could hear her.
She had a name, and she said, when I questioned her about it, that she was my muse. But, she has never been able to tell me why she was there with me. We never found out, Amaris and I. I think I am not the first in my family, but I didn’t go much further. When we started to discuss this subject, I pictured her growing with me in my mother’s womb, getting an invisible shape, tiny hands, legs… I saw her exit my mother’s body right after I did, and crawl to lay on her stomach, until her eyes opened for the first time and she lifted up in the air, evanescent, close to me.”

“But…” Lilith cut him cross, confused, “I can see her, now.”

Viggo nodded.
“With time, things changed a bit. Despite I enjoyed my talent, I began to understand that in the highest moments of the creative process I tended to lose my grip on reality. At first, I explained it with an excess of concentration, but in a couple of years, when I was about sixteen, things started to worsen. All I could remember was standing before white canvas, lifting the brush… and then, after what seemed a second, I was staring at the finished picture, and the muscles of my arm ached for the effort. I questioned Amaris about it; she could give me no explanation. But, she admitted, quite scared, that it happened to her, too, just the other way around. She felt like she was sleeping most of the time, like, she said, she was lying in a bathtub and noises and voices became distorted by the sloshing water. The only moments when she was back to her conscious self were when I was in the middle of a creation. Then, she could think lucidly, hear and see properly.”

“At first, we worried about it, but not too much. We were young, you see, and we grew up together. I must confess, we took for granted each other’s presence. I never once doubted that when I was alone in my bed I could call her name and she would answer.”

“The night of my eighteenth birthday, we realized what was happening. I don’t remember who got the in link first, honestly. Maybe we had always been aware it was going to be that way. I had not heard from Amaris in three days. I knew she was by my side, I could feel her presence, and my artistic vein showed no sign of slackening: I kept on writing and painting like I always had, but, she did not answer me anymore. At first, I thought she was angry for some reason. I argued aloud, alone, in empty rooms. I yelled and hit the air with my fists, I begged her. And then, I started to think that maybe she could not hear me anymore.
The night of my birthday, her voice reached me in sleep. She was crying so desperately that I hardly understood her words. I never heard her cry before… it was the saddest sound I ever heard, enough to crush my heart. But, it was so sweet to hear her voice again! I remember those words perfectly, all of them, like it happened yesterday.”

“What did she say?” Lilith asked.

The man reached a hand and smoothed the girl’s golden hair again.
“She said ‘Viggo, why, why do you refuse to talk to me? I cannot feel anything anymore! When I open my eyes, you’re always writing, or painting, and when I call you, you don’t answer me!’
I think it was her desperation that mustered me to talk, in my dream.
‘I do it, too!’ I cried back, ‘I talk to you, but you don’t listen to me! And, when I sit to create something, I lose my grip on time.’”

“Once I said those words, we understood. We were cursed to live side by side, one awake when the other slept. Amaris’ horrified silence in my head confirmed it: when I was awake, she slept, and when I was lost in the daze of my arts, she was conscious.
‘I refuse it!’ I cried in the dream, ‘I can’t lose you! I’d rather give up everything I do, everything I’ve done…’

‘Then, you’ll lose me,’ she said sadly, ‘I am a muse, I cannot live if you give up what I do for you’. She paused for a moment, then she spoke again, and she begged me, ‘promise you’ll never give me up.’

‘I promise.’ I said, and then she seemed to lift in the air, inside the darkness of my dream, and I slipped into a deeper slumber. From that moment on, I never heard Amaris’ voice again.”

Lilith watched him pause. Their eyes crossed, and something inside her stirred and ran through the veins of her arm, down deep to her fingertips, and her arm moved like a pale snake on the table and she grabbed Viggo’s hand and squeezed it.
“It’s so sad,” she whispered. In that moment, dying by the bite of a vampire did not seem the worst thing in the world.

Viggo’s warm fingers squeezed hers back. He smiled.
“Yes, it is. But, something good can come out of that pain. Maybe it was our haunting need to get back our connection that caused it, I don’t know. Maybe Amaris’ knows what happened, but as I told you, I never managed to talk to her again. As years went by, however, her evanescent form became more and more solid. It was a slow process, and it occurred only when I was alone, but I realized that when I lifted my eye she was there, sitting or lying beside me, more and more concrete. One day – I was about thirty years old at that time – I reached a hand and touched her hair. I wrapped a lock around my hand, and it was true, soft… I put my free fist in my mouth and I wailed aloud.”

He smirked.
“And she was always sleeping.”
When Lilith retrieved her hand, she felt like something had changed. It is odd how it happens, sometimes, when you think you can hear something click in your mind and you think ‘something changed’. Maybe it hasn’t, and your life won’t be much different, but you cling to that hope for a small moment, praying you have some kind of control over your life.

“Would you like talking to her?” Viggo asked kindly.

She looked at him, more surprised than how, ironically, she had ever been that night.
“But I thought only…” she began, but again he scrolled his head in that slow, confident fashion, and she saw a tattered leaflet in his hand. Puzzled, she looked at it until Viggo spoke again, softly, and lifting her eyes to his own Lilith saw a pen in his hand.

“It was a pleasure to meet you, Lilith.”
For a moment, he looked on the verge of adding something else, but openly repented; his long fingers squeezed the pen, and when its tip touched the paper, the eyes of the man overturned in their sockets, his mouth broke agape, jaw softening. His chin fell down to his chest, the small tendons of his hand arched under the skin, and he began scribbling furiously, lining words of a lanky, curved writing.
Beside him, Amaris’ golden head raised like a sun, and before Lilith knew it, she was staring into the clear, cerulean eyes of the muse.

“Hello, Lilith,” she said, “First of all, let me say I am sorry for your fate.”

Lilith could just look at her, awestruck. For a split second she felt utterly gloomy, numb and earthbound, facing that creature that seemed to irradiate a delicate, ivory light, and who addressed to her in the sweetest voice. She wanted to reply, thank her in some way, but when voice erupted from her lips the words she said were not the ones she planned to speak.

“Now, I understand why he is so in love with you.”

Maybe Viggo had been right when saying that the tavern was under a spell of complete belief, because all Amaris did was nod in a solemn tone, smiling serenely.
“Yes, he is, and so I am. I heard everything he told you, or, actually, I didn’t hear it, but every time I wake up I remember everything he lived while I was unconscious, I don’t know why; maybe, we are just too bound together. I am glad he gave us this opportunity, he knew that when I’d wake, I would have missed not talking to you. Look,” she added, and Lilith saw her own face taking shape on the leaf on her table, her own eyes and lips, frozen open wide by Viggo’s quick strokes.

“There’s not much left to say, anyway,” Amaris was saying, “I don’t know the reason of what is happening to us more than Viggo. I am persuaded we are not one of a kind, but I can’t see other muses around, I never have.”

“But, why can I see you?” Lilith asked, “Not that I mind, anyway.”

Amaris smiled again, but bit her lower lip in a pondering gesture.
“I am not sure. As Viggo told you, I grew stronger during the years, enough for other people to see me, sometimes, when something about our surroundings allows us to. I can’t be visible everywhere, you see, but its better this way. Imagine if people could see me walk in my sleep down the street! No, we need magic for this to happen, and here magic is thick. Of course, Viggo can see me, and with time I gained enough strength to be slightly independent from him. I vaguely remember how I could not even leave the room, when he was younger.”
The muse reached a hand, and just like the man had done before, she smoothed his face with her fingertips. He gave no sign of noticing it.
“He is a gentle man. He tries to make me live to the bigger extent he’s allowed to. He often walks to the park, when the weather is warm, and he sits on a bench and willingly plunges himself into oblivion, to allow me to wander a bit about. I enjoy walking barefoot on the grass… do you do it?”

“Haven’t in a while,” Lilith breathed, respectfully.

“Sometimes, at night,” Amaris went on, “I walk out of our place, in the street. I cannot go much further than a block away, but it still feels so good, to have the air on your skin! The only thing that makes me sad is that the only one I’d share my feelings with cannot hear me, although…”
she smoothed again the face of the man,
“I know he feels me.”

Lilith wanted to smile. She was very close to smiling, actually, if her heart would not be so heavy. Under other circumstances, the luminous smile of that muse and the kind eyes of the artist would have filled with joy her little, human heart, but she knew their light was not enough anymore. All the light of the world would not have been enough.

For a moment she toyed around the idea of asking Amaris how it felt, to live such an attached life, to be unwholesome for good, the invisible half of somebody else. But, she decided not to; it would have been cruel and bad mannered to ask such a thing and anyway, she realized with a hint of incredulity, their words already provided answers to all the questions she could ever muster.
Was there a point in questioning ‘why he never married?’ or, ‘do you touch him when he can’t see you, do you sit on his lap and take his face in your hands to kiss him?’

Was there a point in asking something simple such as ‘are you happy?’

“I think I should leave you alone, now,” Lilith said, instead, but words came out light and easy from her smiling lips.

“Goodbye, to both of you, and… thank you for being the first. I needed -”

‘What’? she thought Viggo’s blind eyes asked when they crossed her own as she stood up.
His hand moved feverishly on the leaflet, darkening his Lilith’s hair.

She was on the verge of answering: light. Instead, she clutched her glass and turned away, to the second table.

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Song related to this chapter: H.I.M., Face of God.

ninque elen - April 12, 2006 06:51 PM (GMT)
This chappie made me cry and it has been so long since I cried over something someone wrote. But this made me cry and it splintered my heart into a thousand pieces.

Gosh how I love it, love every word, every image, every thought. When I read this is see such brilliance. I see someone who is gifted with words and uses those words to conjure images that speak to my heart and sing around in my head. There is a profound psychology at the bases and an understanding of the human condition. It feels as if you personally touched my heart and reminded me to love and live life to the max cause that is all there is in the end. You crumbled my defences and you are one of the very few who can :love:

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She realized, likewise, how the frozen stupor that had seemed to take over her when she left the polished bench, disengaging her wide eyes from the red mirror, seemed to wash over her in weaker tides, as a clock chimed, inflexible, minute by minute.


This is such a good image and it speaks volumes. It shows that time is constantly running out on us.....that while we are absorbed with ourselves and our lives, time is ticking. That we have to be carefull with what we do with the time given to us, that we must make it wortwhile and last cause there is no going back. And death is waiting for us......just as it is waiting for Lilith here in the form of a vampire.

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There was something, in the way he said those words; kindly, politely, like they meant more than an empty greeting. The man smiled at Lilith as he spoke, the kind of smile aimed at people you know, people you love, people you wish would come and sit at your table. It was probably in the power of that smile and those words that Lilith’s knees buckled, and she fell heavily on the vacant chair.


It spoke to my heart cause isn't this what we all want. To be welcome, to be loved and accepted. We all look desperatly for love, for companionship and friendship and I cannot help but think...if we all gave it away so easily as this man the world would be a better place.

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“Once I said those words, we understood. We were cursed to live side by side, one awake when the other slept. Amaris’ horrified silence in my head confirmed it: when I was awake, she slept, and when I was lost in the daze of my arts, she was conscious.


:cry: there are no words to describe what I felt here or what it means but it is perfect, pure, love and pain.

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Lilith wanted to smile. She was very close to smiling, actually, if her heart would not be so heavy. Under other circumstances, the luminous smile of that muse and the kind eyes of the artist would have filled with joy her little, human heart, but she knew their light was not enough anymore. All the light of the world would not have been enough.


Just this last quote...though in all honesty I would like to quote everything cause it is all so wonderfull.
The light references are so brilliant so breath taking. It shows that the light of other people can help you, shine on you, guide you but that in the end...in order to survive you have to be your own light. And that is why for Lillith all the light in the world wouldn't have been enough. Her light is fading and no one but here can rekindle it.

I feel speechless (though I am aware I hardly give the impression) but in front of such beauty my mind shuts down and just enjoyes the light it is given with this.
:hug:


Ambrosia - April 13, 2006 12:37 AM (GMT)
It's super hard for me to say how much I adored this chapter...I mean, I guess I was first struck with how original it is. I'd have never thought to create a living, breathing muse for a man...though maybe she isn't exactly living. ^_^ I just love the thought behind it, the way Viggo was such an artist that his muse became personified. And, the way they are seperated from communicating, the way they are forced to be one person while they really are two...I dunno, it's just so interesting and rather full of forlorn romance/whimsical-ness.

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He tries to make me live to the bigger extent he’s allowed to. He often walks to the park, when the weather is warm, and he sits on a bench and willingly plunges himself into oblivion, to allow me to wander a bit about. I enjoy walking barefoot on the grass… do you do it?”


This part totally makes me go...le sigh. It shows how pure the muse is, still walking around barefoot on the grass. Its a nice thing to do, specially in the springtime. Don't think I'll ever do it again without thinking of Amaris. She seems so golden.


~Jewelz~ - April 13, 2006 05:28 AM (GMT)
:eek: ...Mena, you amaze me. Incredible work.

*too dumbstruck to think of anything to say*... :blush:

Ttfn :)

Jaime Girl - April 14, 2006 01:23 AM (GMT)
Wow. Just...wow.

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For a moment she toyed around the idea of asking Amaris how it felt, to live such an attached life, to be unwholesome for good, the invisible half of somebody else.


I love this theme, the 'invisible half of someone else' part. You could almost put it into context of she's his subconscious or something, but of course you have to make it so heartbreakingly poetic. And the tragedy of them being in love but not being conscious together - it kills me, really it does.

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful!! :love:

Mena - April 18, 2006 08:33 AM (GMT)
Whoa, Jess, you quoted!! :lol:

Nah, seriously, girls, thank you so much for your replies, you know how muh they mean to me.

So, I actually planned to post tomorrow or Thursday, but Stacy got me all giddy with Dance of the Debutante, so since her chapter's next I am posting it now to thank her.
If she likes it, that is, I am nervous!


Chapter three. Killing loneliness. (the girl, the wizard and his obsession).

Again, she was looking at a man and a woman. They were sitting very close together, and his hands lay open on the table like flowers, nestled into the paler ones of his companion. But Lilith had no chance to observe them discreetly like any stranger would do, because both their eyes had been looking at her, she realized, since she left the barstool by the bench and went to sit on a vacant chair identical to the one that was before her now.

For a split second this awareness annoyed her. She wondered, half the way between bitterness and shame, if the couple of strangers before her had been silently judging her, whispering, their heads close. Look, she’s going to die. She wondered if something in her face showed it, if the unavoidable sentence of death struck at her had already began to affect her appearance, stealing away the gleam of her eyes, tainting her skin with the decaying rottenness of corpses.
But when she moved a step closer, invading their vital space, the man looked at her and smiled openly.
“Good evening, Lilith.” He said merrily, “please, take a seat.”

She did, placing the glass before her, and like she remembered about it just then, raised it to take a sip of the drink. It scratched her mouth and throat, sliding into her stomach, burning coldly.
“Let us introduce ourselves,” the man spoke again, his voice ringing of the same peculiar vibration that she felt oddly familiar – she scanned her mind for the memory of it, through memories she owned before she stepped past the crimson door, and a flat surprise confirmed that the emotion in the voice of the man was – simply – happiness.
“My name is Dominic,” he stretched his hand, that Lilith shook absent-mindedly, “and this is Penelope.”

“Lilith.” She said her name like she was chewing it, and it tasted alien on her lips. The young woman before her was beautiful, she mused in her quiet stupor: she had long, dark hair and flawless skin. Her eyes looked like splinters of sapphire.

Beside her, the young man twitched in open glee. He looked positively young, not particularly handsome, but the light spreading on his irregular features gave him the appearance of a spirited, joyful creature.
“Dominic,” the girl, Penelope, spoke for the first time, “please, try and calm down, it’s not very polite towards our Lilith, given what she is facing tonight.”
She had spoken in a sweet, intimate voice, but the effect of her words seemed to seed down the man’s enthusiasm. Still, a rebel smile broke on his lips as he turned to Lilith, scrolling his shoulders in a childish apology.
“It’s our first night out in a while,” he explained, “but Penelope is right. Sorry, Lilith.”

“It’s… fine,” she replied at once, tightening her inner grip on something in the back of her head that stirred: a wounded, nightmarish beast of fear pulled its leash with a growl of protest, roaring in an intelligible language that it was starting to wake up.
It was about time, Lilith mused, keeping it down with not much effort: the fear, the ultimate fear full of awareness had been starting to knot and get a shape, while she was looking into the pure eyes of the blonde muse who told her how good it felt to walk barefoot on the grass; and now, she was forced to endure the company of two polite strangers who talked to her like she had a dying illness…

“Why is it your first night out?” she resumed in asking politely, and into her mind the monster flared its nostrils and waited, alert.

The two of them exchanged a quick glance; there was no doubt the young man was bursting to talk, but when Lilith’s eyes jerked aside to Penelope’s face she saw concern, and shame, in her azure pools.
“We heard you talking to Dixie, and to them,” Penelope said slowly, like every word was heavy on her lips; when she said ‘them’ she did not point at the table behind her, but she obviously meant it; “We know that you would not mind sharing some words will all the patrons here, but, you see, we were wondering… how good would it be?”

Lilith’s mind quivered, and wrapped up like a snake around Penelope’s words. Her last sentence hung mid-way between the two of them oscillating heavy of cryptic meanings. For a split second Lilith was about to say: ‘how good would it be for me to know all about life, death and what lies behind them, since I am dying?’, but before she could, her snakelike mind jerked forwards, words slipping from her mouth, out of reach to her will power:
“What’s your sin?” she asked quietly. When words rolled out her mouth, she smiled.

Dominic and Penelope were looking at her, she noticed, not shaken at all, not taken aback by her hazardous leap: she had somehow took for granted that their presence there needed an explanation, and this explanation could just be as bad as they seemed so gentle and kind. Apparently, they agreed.

Penelope’s pale hand reached the one of her companion. She did not clasp it, but she ran a finger down the lines of his palm, confidently, like she had done it a million times before, and her eyes never left Lilith. The girl wished to see them turn cold, judgmental or angry, but all there was in Penelope’s eyes was a serene indulgence. There was triumph and love, and maybe a bit of compassion.
“I think you should start our telling, Dominic,” she began, “but Lilith, let me say something before Dom tells you all about us: you are right, there is a sin above us, like on the most of the people here. You’re right in not giving for granted people’s good, because it means to train yourself to rely on their mercy, and mercy graces victims less often than one might fear. Be bad, if you can; don’t hurt anyone, but keep in mind you might need to very soon. There’s another thing – “
Her sapphire eyes blazed, and her lips parted to disclose teeth that were just as white as her skin,
“Do not judge us. We are, to the eyes of most, bad people. We’ll go to Hell – because Hell exists, trust me – but still we are of the kindest people you’ll find in this venue, and given what it’s left to leave to you, it’s not much. Do not judge any of your people, little Lilith; you might not be here with a purpose, but keep on listening to us nevertheless, you never know.”

“How do you know?” Lilith cut her cross, because Penelope’s eyes shone too vividly and her voice was as white as her teeth.

“I do not know,” The woman replied slowly, “I see.”

“Fine.” Dominic interrupted her. This time there was no cheerfulness in his voice, but a grave seriousness, and he somehow looked older than five minutes before.
“Our story is, actually, quite simple, at least for the standards of the magical world. It could take us light ages to scan and check all the moral implications, but it’s not lessons I am meant to provide you with. Your time is running fast, so let’s simply concentrate on facts. Feel free to question, anyway.”

He paused, a small, imperceptible hesitation before a leap; his chest heaved a bit and his chin pointed an inch upper when he said, with a strange, metallic pride:
“I am a wizard.”

“A wizard.” Lilith repeated, refraining at once from saying: ‘a wizard, you?’

“I am two-hundred and forty-six years old, but as you can see, I still look reasonably young. I told you are free to question, but let me explain everything properly. I am not boasting my skills here, trust me, I used to be a very powerful wizard, and I can handle deadly enchantments. Of course when it comes to power you have different currents of thought, and you’ll find many who don’t agree with me, and were happy to see me end up… well, you’ll see. I was one of the Seven who destroyed the Formulae of Change, legacy of the Druids.”

Lilith gasped.
The destruction of the Formulae of Change was the Waterloo of the untamed magical world, was the magical upside down of the French Revolution, the proof that past centuries and centuries, wizards and witches could still claim their leadership on the magical world, overcoming all the other creatures.
However, when seven among the most powerful wizards and witches of the time gathered in a hidden location, about a century before, and through a treacherous, long series of spells destroyed all the copies of the ancient enchantment forged by the Druids, that allowed the radical change in the nature of their performer, it was more than a demonstrative action.
Through water and flame and paper and stone, I command thee, lest come undone.’
The ultimate destroying spell had become the universal motto of lodged Magic, the magic of civilized creatures, of books, candles and spells. And, the young man before her was one of those who…

“I used to be a good alchemist,” Dominic went on, proud but poised, “Actually, spells have always been something complementary, to me. I need to feel my power over things, and spells, the verbal ones in riddles, they are too volatile. No, give me something tangible, give me dragon claw powder and mercury, ash and wine, and, a tying spell, of course. Any questions?” he smiled at Lilith’s dropped jaw. She felt a shiver run through her spine, and suddenly, her hands jerked to fists: she never dreamed about meeting a man who was this close to everything she had always been eager to know, and yet there he was, before her, revealing secrets even too wild and beautiful for a humble human mind to handle– and he wondered if she had questions, she, Lilith, who worshipped magic like a light chasing away darkness, Lilith, who had been living on questions and now she was about to die.

“Why do you say you ‘used’ to be?” she asked stiffly. Inside her soul, the dark shapeless beast pulled its leash in an abrupt excess of strength. It roared words inside her head, and for an instant Lilith could not hear her own voice:
‘You’re dying already… walking barefoot on the grass… nobody worries about having a peculiarity… Lilith… don’t judge us… be bad if you can… Lilith… through water and flame… Lilith…’

“I have been expelled from the lodge of Magic.” Dominic answered flatly, not an ounce of regret rippling his voice. “I still have powers, of course! Warlock blood stays within you until you die. Don’t believe it when they sell you nasty tales about wizards being sentenced to death, wands broken in two and stuff. Actually,” he pondered pensively, “there is no effective way to break a wand. It is a tool to catalyze power, you see, integral part of the wizard or witch. A wand breaks on its own only when its owner dies, and this can happen in two ways: they can be killed, or decide to let themselves die. I never met a warlock who succumbed to natural accidents or plagues.”

“But why have you…” Lilith began, but something in the corner of her eye answered her unsaid words: the white wide movement of Penelope’s hand.

“For me.” She said, “it’s because of me.”

“Penelope,” Dominic went on, his voice still low, narrating, and maybe this was the creepiest thing of all, how he looked so cheerful, young and alive and yet his voice sounded so flat and mesmerizingly far away, “yes, Penelope was the cause of my damnation. It’s because of her that I, one of the Greatest Seven, am now considered doomed scum.”

“It happened about eighty years ago. I used to live in England, at that time. It was a misty day of Spring, when I took a walk down Camden Town, in London. It was the daring, light-hearted and yet noble England of the 1920’s, and I was a powerful wizard. I’ll make a long story short for you, Lilith. I entered a painter’s shop, and she was there.” He paused, waiting.

“Framed in gold, hanging to the wall. Yes –“ he gently nodded at Lilith, though she didn’t speak, “it was the portrait of a young woman, just like you see her now. She sat in an oval frame, breast-length, looking away with one, gleaming blue eye. I don’t know what took over me in that moment. Maybe it was a revenge of the Druids, a hidden counter-jinx that struck at me when I first lay my eyes on that picture. I was cursed. I bought it and carried it home with me, and from the moment my hands touched the frame, I knew my fate had come to the ultimate twist.”

“As you can easily imagine, my obsession quickly turned into madness. Madness, for a wizard, is even more dangerous than for a humble man, because in both ways, it’s a back door creaking open inside your head, opening on a long, dark tunnel, full of poisonous spirits and odds. But the powers of a wizard are so impressive sometimes, that the abuse of them leads to tragedies never to be compared to the folly of a cursed man.”

“I wanted her. I spent days and nights away staring at her blue eye, lost away into dead distance, rocking on the floor, stretching my shaking hand to brush her painted lips. I called the name written at the bottom of the portrait like an omen – Penelope, Penelope. I forsake everything, food, sleep, light. The loneliness that is helplessly implied in our power, the one I had been experiencing for almost two centuries took its toll on me like never before. I could not take it.”

“I soon found out that there were no spells to bring to life an unanimated portrait. Giving life is not easy. Restore it, claim back the living from the realm of dead, it is difficult. But profuse life into something that never was alive, give it a brain, a voice, a conscience, well, it was impossible. It is not just about giving life, you see. You have to force life to stick inside its target, force it to independently replicate itself for good. It was impossible, as I said. But I had to do it.”

“Of course, you cannot create life from scratch, none of the most powerful of wizards can do it. All you can do is find a way to channel it into a precise target and force it to linger there. Sometimes though, the only way to find life, is to steal it.”

“I understood, at some point along my quest, that I was about to enter the lowest, the most horrid and unforgivable patterns of dark magic. The more I searched and learned, the more I understood I was about to doom myself forever, my soul, my future. But, I did not care. All I could see, through my feverish quest, was Penelope’s eye.”

Dominic stopped. There was something monstrous, something dirty, in his innocent and childish smile: it was the beautiful danger of a dancing snake, or a tiger about to leap. It was the gleam in the eye of the hawk, swooping in a dive.
“Somehow, I managed to create a potion, but I knew it was not enough. Can you tell me, Lilith, what does the twelfth rule of Spells warrant? I’ll begin it for you: the greater the magic – “

“- the greater the sacrifice. Wine for poison, gold for flight, sacrifice…” she swallowed, “sacrifice for life.”

“Precisely.” Dominic lifted Penelope’s hand into his own, smoothing it, and kindly forced it open. He dipped his face inside it, like smelling a white flower, and from there, he whispered again.
“I understood that the way you are understanding it now. I needed to steal life, and in the most brutal way I could think of, because my loath towards pain, and the helpless blame I’d put on myself was part of the requited sacrifice.”

He severed his face from Penelope’s hand, but didn’t let her go.
“I used to live in a small village on the north-east of London, at that time. It was a quiet place, perfect for my experiments. The people were too poor to mind my business, too earthbound. Yes, nothing more than ignorant peasants they were. Now, Lilith, what I am going to tell you might shock you, but as I said before, let’s stick to facts. You seem competent enough to understand why I did what I did. At least, I hope so.”

“There was a child. I saw him every day when I walked to and from the village for food. He tottered behind me for about half a mile, ragged, thin and pale, but always smiling. Sometimes, when he followed me to my shabby, he sang.”

“I am not sure I fathered him, I am quite sure of it though, but I guess we’ll never know.
So, it was a cold winter night, when the potion I let ripen for a full month was ready, and on that night I catered myself the last ingredient.”

“I found the boy after a quite short search. He was cuddled against the inner wall of a rundown house, shivering under his hooded mantel. I knelt before him, and he smiled when he saw me. I don’t think he was older than seven or eight, but they were so thin, at that time… so, I knelt before the boy, I took his face in my hands, and then –“

Dominic smiled slowly,
“I ripped his eyes out of his head.”

Lilith screamed. She did it without even thinking, a small, startled shriek, muffled by her stretched hands. She looked at the young man before her, who was not smiling anymore, but he was not sad, or ashamed, either. Inside her, the black beast roared in panic, and black spots appeared to blur her vision. She breathed, once, twice.

“I am not proud of what I did,” Dominic was saying, “but I had no choice.”

“No choice?” Lilith hissed, maybe too loudly, “no choice, you said?”

“Enough.” Penelope’s voice filled the gap between them, and the woman looked at her coldly, like a perfect, deadly porcelain doll, “who do you think you are? And most of all, who do you think we are? What were you expecting, children tales about fairies and unicorns? Take a look around you, little girl! We are cursed! All of us, everybody here, did something awful or were born in sin. What did all those years spent studying magic teach you? To believe? To suspect? Magic is not taught to believe, it’s taught to quit seeking moral implications in it.”

Lilith looked at her, wide-eyed.
“He did it all for you… and, this is all you can say? Is that the answer, in the end? No answer, no reason? How can you catch some sleep?”

Penelope shook her head.
“I am alive. I didn’t ask for it, and this is a common feature of all living things. Why then should I feel guilty for something I was given without asking? I feel, I see, I have a man who loves me. I don’t care if this comes after the sacrifice of innocent strangers. Why should you do it?”

But Lilith was not listening to her anymore. Her eyes were looking at Dominic, who lingered on her an expectant look. Like before, when he told her about ancient rites of magic, he was waiting for her feedback, for her answers, and his blue eyes shone of confident expectation. Lilith looked at Penelope: maybe that was the real difference between good and bad, between those who could still aspire to redemption and those who were left behind: that the second stopped caring long ago.

“Yes, I know why you did it.” She replied to his question that he never asked directly, “I know why his eyes.” She took a breath, and once again, words shimmered and flied into her head.
“The eye is the gate between the brain and the external world. It roots straight into the brain, but it’s the most out-oriented of our organs. Eyes connect us to each other more than anything else. Sight prevents isolation, and builds memory. With memory comes thought, and so, the whole rational process of lucubration. We think about what we see. Eyes record life, select, store it. Eyes were believed to be magical chests where the soul lived. Yes, eyes could be one of the three ultimate elements for powerful black magic: eyes, brain, and heart. But the other two are too attached to the soul of their owner, too intimately safe into their bodies. The eyes, instead, are less private right because of their purpose.”

Dominic nodded slowly.
“That is why I took them. I was not sure one eye was enough. I took them and hid them in a cloth. Once home, I dipped them into the cooled potion, handling them by the optical nerve. Then, carefully, I placed the portrait on a table, and I let the eye oscillate before it, slowly. I dangled it for seven times, in seven circles. Then I let it fall, right above Penelope’s mouth. For a moment I feared it might just slip away and squash to the floor, but instead, her lips opened when the eye touched them. I did the same with the other eye, and once she swallowed it, she turned towards me inside her frame, stretching her hands I had never seen before, and I clasped them and dragged her out.”

“That is why you said this is your first night out in while, yes?” Lilith’s voice mused tiredly, pensively, “A month to seed the potion and I bet you cannot do it too often. What does happen, when the effect of the spell begins to diminish?” She turned to the woman, who cast her eyes down.

“My eyes,” she said in a feeble voice, “they bleed me to blindness. It’s not… very nice.”

Lilith surveyed the two of them, slowly, before getting up.
“You are a great wizard,” she said respectfully. Dominic bowed his head in a light greeting, and Penelope smiled at her.

“Maybe we were asking too much of you, asking you to understand,” she said with what sounded like candid respect, but Lilith shook her head.

“You warned me, and begged me not to judge you. Actually I… I think I understand. Yes,” she repeated again, firmly,
“I think I understand. I am dying in a while and at least I wish it was for something great like…” she trailed off, but pointed her chin towards Penelope, who smiled sadly. For a moment, Lilith swore she saw a tear of blood roll down the woman’s immaculate cheek.

“You’re not much more wronged than me, after all.” She whispered softly, her head tilted down.

Tears blurred her vision, and all she could see were her feet, moving cautiously on the tawny floor, and her hand holding the glass. She almost tripped over a chair, before snapping her head up, surprised.

She was standing by one of the two corner tables, one of the two she didn’t make out properly in the smoky light. Now, much closer, she found herself standing by the side of a young man, who looked back at her curiously, a soft smile on his lips.
“Don’t cry,” he said kindly, tilting his head aside in a pensive concern. He had smoldering dark eyes that shone warm in the dim light. His hand lifted from the table in a wide move, like he was swimming.

“Come, sit here with us,” he said, even more sweetly.

“No.”

Another voice stopped Lilith dead in her tracks before she could accomplish the request. She turned abruptly, her drink sloshing dangerously, but the woman sitting at the table stood her glance with stubborn resolution.
“No, she can’t sit here, not yet.” She tossed a furious glare at the man, but he simply furrowed a brow.

“Vida…” he protested lazily, but the woman raised her chin in an imitation of his plain, weak concern.

“Orlando…” she said in a mocking tone. “She can’t. It’s too early.”

The young man called Orlando smiled apologetically at Lilith, making her frown. The stupid, absurd need of him opposing his companion made her guts growl, but all she could see on the man’s face was a dull, lazily sympathetic apology, when he pointed at the table behind her back like saying she needed to go there, first.

Lilith turned over, moving a hesitant step in that direction.
The voice of the man called Orlando reached her like a friendly, encouraging push.

“Remember to ask William about betrayal.”

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Song related to this chapter: H.I.M., 'killing loneliness'

ninque elen - April 18, 2006 05:45 PM (GMT)
Hey sweetie,

Now before I begin my reply let me tell you something. I read this chappie, this wonderfull imaginative chappie of yours. I went down, made some dinner and mean while thought about it. There was something familiar in this tale and it took me little time to nail it. I went back upstairs and read it again but now something wholly different came to mind. I actually needed to scribble down several things to see the pattern lying underneath it. The point is that I have 2 completly different interpretations for this chappie now....2 very long seperate replies I could give you.

One I will write down here and as for the other one (which you might not like so much) I will send you a pm. I hope you like this deal but anyways I hope you can see that there is such a magnificient world hidden in your words, that there are so many layers.....that it can only be done by someone with a true gift and talent :hug:

Now as for what was familiar about this story. Did you ever read; "The Sandman" by E.T.A. Hoffman? If you didn't you should. It is a short story and one of the most famous in literary tradition.

A crude summary of the sandman would be that a young engaged man falls in love with another woman. This man has nightmares about the death of his father by a mythical figure; the sandman (who steals the eyes of young children). At one day when he is looking at the woman (on whom he has a secret crush) he meets a man who resembles this sandman; this man sells things. This sandman look alike offers him eyes to see (they turn out to be glasses) He buys a pair of glasses (eyes thus) and uses them to look at his secret crush. She becomes more and more lovely to his eyes and he begins to date her though everyone else thinks her to be odd. It is only at the end he finds out that she is not a woman but a mechanic doll who seemed more alive when he looked through the glasses (eyes) he bought.

This chappie interplays with this story remarkably. The theme is the same and somehow you compose it with some of the same elements. Still no one could ever think it is a copy. It is much to different, it has its own brilliance and uniqueness. But there are links and I fund oit quite remarkable. Now we had a to read's Frued's vision on it *grins* But I will spare you that. I just hope you can see that your chapppie links with a great work of literature...and only other literature can play with a text as the Sandman like yours did!!

I also want to say that I truly love your characterisations, your descriptions and the way you develope Lillith more and more. Her fear, her thoughts are so real, have such psychological depth that I feel as if she is real, that she exists. I also need to say that I have the feeling that you know me more and understand me more than I sometimes even imagine :hug:

Brilliant babe, that is all I can say...and what I have been trying to show you here!


ps I am sorry for rambling on and on. I hope it did make some sense to you

Jaime Girl - April 22, 2006 04:05 AM (GMT)
I actually read this last night and needed to muse on it a little. Of course I love all the suspense of the storylines you're creating - I could go on for hours about this one, I tell ya, but I won't. I think the thing that really struck me about this chap was the mention of the growing fear in Lilith. You're gradually building this character a little at a time, as you always do, and it actually came as a bit of a surprise to read about her fear...although of course it's only natural.

Jesus, you like to play with people's minds, don't you? lol Evil, evil author!

Mena - April 22, 2006 11:33 AM (GMT)
*bows to readers*

Gosh, you girls are amazing! And yes, Jay, it took me a while to decide how I wanted Lilith to react to what was going on... although this is a story of pure fantasy, I always need to pour a hint of reality in... my curse, cannot help it!

And...

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esus, you like to play with people's minds, don't you? lol Evil, evil author!

Yes, I do. :shine: It's all about me, remember?

Skilos - April 23, 2006 10:22 AM (GMT)
Bahhumbug.

*Toungue momentarily out of order*
*Looks at hands... These still work*

Okay on the the review.

Dear Mena, Oh how you write. it is lovely. You are able to create original character in this amazing world and I love you for it.
The style is macnificent and I look forward to read more.
Just like with the older works of Ambrosia, I am currently looking trough the library and anything else to read more of your stories.

Please write more soon!

Bloomiecurse - April 23, 2006 10:33 AM (GMT)
Well Anna dear... you leave me speechless.
It is amazing how your style has not only evolved, but become multi expressive (don't know if this means anything in English :tsk: ).
I am amazed at how your writing abilities have bloomed and I love the fact you can pass from genre to genre without losing your skill of "telling a story" (whatever story!) and keep your readers glued to the screen till the very last word.

Brava! Brava! Brava!

:bloom:

Ambrosia - April 24, 2006 01:23 AM (GMT)
Phew, I can finally come in here and reply to this great chapter. :yes: I have to say, I was very curious of what you would choose for Dom and Stacy's characters. And, yes, I very much loved your decision! ^_^ Firstly, I must say I enjoyed at the beginning the way Dom was all fidgety and the like, sorta like the real Dom. teehee!

I really liked the whole idea of bringing a portrait to life, and the sacrifice that Dom had to go through in order to do it. The description of Penelope's painting with just one eye showing really affected me...I dunno why, but the fact that he stared at just her one eye was a powerful image here. I loved it!

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She wondered if something in her face showed it, if the unavoidable sentence of death struck at her had already began to affect her appearance, stealing away the gleam of her eyes, tainting her skin with the decaying rottenness of corpses.


A description to die for...pardon the pun. :laugh:

Must say how much I like the details about the monster of fear rising up periodically inside of Lillith. She is a strong girl, after all, but even the strongest would have a hard time battling the fear of death. I think you wrote it extremely well.

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That is why I took them. I was not sure one eye was enough. I took them and hid them in a cloth. Once home, I dipped them into the cooled potion, handling them by the optical nerve. Then, carefully, I placed the portrait on a table, and I let the eye oscillate before it, slowly. I dangled it for seven times, in seven circles. Then I let it fall, right above Penelope’s mouth. For a moment I feared it might just slip away and squash to the floor, but instead, her lips opened when the eye touched them. I did the same with the other eye, and once she swallowed it, she turned towards me inside her frame, stretching her hands I had never seen before, and I clasped them and dragged her out.”


Killer sick, babe! The optic nerve line got me. Seriously brilliant! Creepy and awesome all in one go!

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“I am alive. I didn’t ask for it, and this is a common feature of all living things. Why then should I feel guilty for something I was given without asking? I feel, I see, I have a man who loves me. I don’t care if this comes after the sacrifice of innocent strangers. Why should you do it?”


I really liked this part because Penelope does have a truly valid point. Just like all others, she didn't ask to be born, so why should she feel guilty for it. She didn't tell Dominic to kill the child, and now she can't change things. Cool perspective!

Loved their tale! The last line kills me! Squee!

Mena - April 24, 2006 04:50 PM (GMT)
Awww, girls, thank you so much! Moon, I started reading your story and now I can honestly say it's a treat to receive compliments from an author like you. You definitely got some sheer talent!

Ursi... you know what it means to me you're still reading! Despite you haven't been writing for AGES *hint hint* you're still one of my true blue idols. No lip service paid here, I pinkie swear!

And, Am... I nodded and grinned at your choice of quotes... i'd admit it, the optica nerve part is one of my favourites because I am the first to find it disturbing.

On to the next chapter... I actually planned to post on Wednesday, but I won't be there tomorrow and I had some massive editing to perform, and i didn't feel like doing it from a computer in the uni lab.

The next chapter is not betaed because I wanted it to be a bit of a surprise for my beta, and she agreed. i hope you'll enjoy it, but i gotta warn y'all, there is some mild-creepy stuff in it.

Oh, the whole story about the genesis of werewolves is a fabrication of my mind, so it won't make much sense. :P


Chapter four. The cage. (the girl, the werewolf and her guardian).

The voice reached her ears before she walked around the table to face its occupants. It came in a light, sing-song tone, back grounded with bemused laughter.
“Look, she’s here, the girl! Oh, let her come closer, closer, yes…”

It was the woman who spoke. Lilith stood before the couple at the table, and her eyes lingered on the woman, because it was her voice, after all, that claimed her attention. The woman looked back at her in plain, open curiosity, stretching across the table like she wanted to cut the distance between the two of them.
Her eyes moved restlessly, scanning Lilith’s face again and again, and once in a while she bit her lower lip or titled her head aside. She showed a creamy complexion, and chestnut blonde hair. All together, she looked like flesh moving, breathing, irradiating most of all a true, personal warmth, so different from the ivory light Lilith witnessed in the other women she had been speaking with.

He woman stretched a hand across the table, and her long nails shone in the dim bronze light; her lips parted in the greatest smile Lilith had seen that night, and when she eyed those stretched fingers she realized, at once, of badly she longed to touch them.

“Sit here, darling,” the woman called with open thrill, “sit here next to me.”

Lilith’s legs moved. All the horror, all the fright of the past hours flied away from her mind, swept away by the amber light that was that woman. She was earth and flesh, bronze jewels and an open smile, and despite shivers still rolled down her spine Lilith was walking closer, another step closer, pulled by that smile. She was almost on the verge of sitting down when a male voice touched her, three simple words that placed themselves firmly on her shoulders like hands, stopping her dead on her tracks.
“Tala, stop it.”

For the first time, Lilith looked at the man in the dim light.
He had fair hair, and in the small distance his eyes looked green. But – she shivered, what once must had been regular, fine features were tainted by a long, irregular scar that ran to cut his face from his right cheekbone, down to his chin, white and thick. A smaller scar, purple of unfinished healing, traced its way down the corner of his left eye like a long violet tear.

“Feel free to make yourself comfortable.” The man smiled at Lilith in a dry tone. He looked tired, the peculiar tiredness of people who are never allowed to lower their guard. “But don’t sit too close to Tala, please.”

She was too tired to reply. Her knees buckled and she fell into the chair with the full force of her slumbered body. Still, the man was glaring at her from his scarred face, but the woman, Tala, kept on smiling, like she was aware of the delicious way her teeth shone in the dim light. Who would choose the green glare of a man over the smile of a woman? Surely not the poor Lilith, who was losing a battle against the horror inside her mind. She felt, oddly dismayed, that the beast inside of her was munching at the rim of her rational ability to keep her thoughts focused only on the next moment ahead. It was gnarling it, patiently, skillfully, tearing holes of quiet despair into her head, and its poisonous breath filled her cells, black and dirty like soot, and it smelled like rotten fear, a violent fear she felt growing stronger and stronger.

So, she shot a bitter glare at the cold man, and moved her chair a bit aside, closer to Tala. His lips turned into a thin, white line, his eyes narrowed, but Lilith’s little act of rebellion was rewarded, because Tala leaned in and took her hands into her own. For a while, Lilith sat looking at those hands entwined, lying pale and creamy on the surface of the table. Her glass was now only half-full, she thought lazily, but she did not remember drinking from it.

Tala’s hands were warm into her own, and she found herself wandering quietly, peacefully off-shore like a ship sailing away into the open water. She felt, maybe not completely, that for the second time that night something changed inside her. She allowed th