I have this story posted on EWFN and I thought that I might like to share it with you here. It's an NC-17 rated short about a young woman's experience in a night club V.I.P. room which I will post in small sections. Please let me know what you think. Your comments would be greatly appreciated.



The bass was pounding in my ears. My head was swimming, and my ability to act and think rationally was severely diminished. I loved every second of it. I loved the way the bright lights dazzled before my eyes, the way that time seemed to move in frames, the way the crowd in the huge night club seemed to sway and jump up and down in unison. City life was magnificant, however, this was the first night in a long time that I allowed myself to enjoy it.

Work was bearing down on me, I had just broken up with my boyfriend, and I was going mad with exams at school. My best friend Katelynn had taken a good few hours of her time in convincing me to join her tonight at the club. It was called Maxim, and it was located on the downtown strip where all the big clubs, bars, and strip clubs were located. I would argue that this sort of thing wasn't my style, but tonight, everything was my style and I left my house in a slinky black dress that barely covered my body, andmy long chocolately curls dressed atop my head. Tonight, I told myself, I was going to live it up.

I was at the point where I couldn't really walk properly, not only because the club was so packed, but also because I was severely intoxicated. I loved the hot, sexy feeling inside of me, and I was on top of the world, the star of the night, and I was on fire as I danced on top of one of the huge speakers on the floor. I swung my hips this way and that, feeling myself up, generating various cat calls from the guys in the audience.

I didn't know if it was my own drunkenness, or if my eyes were seeing the real thing, but Maxim's seemed to have admitted only the hottest of the hottest males into the club. I looked to my left, spilling my drink a little bit to see Katelynn dirty dancing on the floor. I laughed, as she may as well have stripped herself of her clothing and fucked the guy on the floor. I paid no mind to her choice of dance, and when back to my own strip tease - minus the stripping part.

I was getting down and dirty on that speaker. I silently thanked myself that I had worn full back underwear, because I was positive that in my provocative moves, my dress wasn't hiding much. I didn't care.

And so when I saw this one guy in particular staring up at me, his deep eyes on fire, I couldn't contain myself. I directed myself towards him, looking into his eyes as I ran my hand up the inside of my thigh, taking a swig of my drink (God knows what it was), before allowing my hand to travel up under my dress, pulling the material up my legs, showing off my garter and some of my lacy black underwear. I smiled what I thought was sexily at him, and descended into the crowd, intending on meeting my audience.

I made my way first to the bar, ordering myself another drink, slurring my words a little. The music was thumping in my head, and I swooned as the strobe light came on. I got up to walk towards where I thought the man would be, but discovered I definitely wouldn't make it.

"Fuck it. He can find me!" I said, sitting back down on the stool, nearly missing it. I closed my eyes and allowed the beat to consume me.

Just as I thought I was about to pass out completely unconscious, I felt hot breath at my neck, and could smell the faint scent of cologne and sex. I opened my eyes, heavy with consumption and looked over at whoever had introduced himself into my personal space. It was him. He leaned into me, whispering something inaudible into my ear. I nodded anyway, and he took my hand, leading me through the crowd.

We were in the centre of everything. My captor stood behind me, wrapping his arms around my waste, holding me close. I closed my eyes, and allowed myself to move along with him to the beat. He ground his hips into my backside, and I loved the way it felt. I remember him being slightly hard, as I lifted my arms behind my head, taking hold of his neck and pulling his face to my neck. He took the opportunity to kiss the sensitive skin, running his tongue lightly along my exposed flesh. I could feel electricity spread throughout my body, and turned to face him, taking him in.

He was absolutely the most gorgeous specimen of humanity I had ever seen. He had dark chocolate curls much like my own, shaggy, framing his perfect face. His complexion was flawless and was dominated by his deep brown eyes. I gave him the same smile I had offered him while I was dancing on the speaker, and he smiled back, his eyes boring into my own green ones. I allowed the moment to take over, and I kissed him, soft and slow. He responded, opening his mouth allowing my entrance. I traced his lips with my tongue, before penetrating his mouth. I felt amazing, my tongue massaging his, his lips pressing back against mine, his hands travelling up and down my back methodically.

I distinctly remember my thoughts at that moment, when the music faded into the background, and the massive crowd seemed to dissipated and disappear into nothingness. I wanted him. I had to have him. I didn't know if my sexual desires were hightened because of the alcohol, but I didn't care. I pulled him into me and whispered into his ear something to the effect of "let's get out of here." He nodded, and taking my hand, led me through the crowd into a hallway I didn't know existed, and I didn't care.

From what I can remember, there were a series of doors, all with numbers on them. Some of them had tags on the knobs, others didn't. We made it to the end of the hallway where we found a few rooms labelled V.I.P. It had slipped my mind at the time as to what that stood for, but I went inside anyways to find a very lushly decorated room, that looked almost like a fancy hotel room, minus the bathroom, and windows.

He led me over to where the bed was, letting me crawl on first. Somewhere along the way I must have discarded my drink, or finished it off, because I no longer had it. To be honest, I really didn't need it.

Woohaaa definitly hot stuff what you are writing here.
You totally captivated me with it.....
and I definitly would love to read some more of this story.
*smiles*

Great writing!

I loooooved it that story had me drooling til... whats this not the rest where is it? lol I need to know dang forms are down on EWFN erg! :love: :cloud#9: